Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-11-03

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some countries today, there is an attitude that 'anyone can do it' in the arts - music, literature, acting, art, etc. As a result, people with no talent become rich and famous and genuine talent is not valued or appreciated.

Do you agree or disagree?

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Some individulas believe that anyone can do any things, so those individuals with no talent become rich and famous and genuine talent is not value or appreciated. I strongly disagree with this stamtemen because in mordern world there is a lot of compationa, so this make more difficults to become famousfor those persons who has no talents and it also opne the stage to talented persons.

One reason behind the belive that genuine talent is not valued are compatetion. . The most of the talents can not the grow because of the lot of compatetion in morden world, so most of the individuals do not show the their talent. As a result most of the people start to consider that there is no palce for talents. The clear example of this is can be seen in traditioonal world. where most of the individuals want to become the actore, so every one start to preparing for actor. But there were limited carar in that field. As a result most of indiviuals rejected.

I strongly belive that rich and famous persons have talent. Thos perons who have talents and work on talent become rich and famouse. Those persones who is best in there field usaly do their work perfectly than every individuals start think, they can also do this things. The individuals also consider that rich individuals get money from their family. This thinking arise because of the one believing in any one can do any thing. But they forget to consider that famous and rich individuals worked hard to improves their talent. The clear example of this can be seen in India. In India most of the people believe that they can become acter because most of the acter do their work perfectly. That start to fell effortless. They can do that by their lot of year stuggrel.

In conclution, there are place for those persons who are talented. But this is not wright to think that individuals who are famous and rich are not talented. I stongly believe that to achieve something biger need talented or hardworking

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You state a clear disagreement in the introduction and return to it in the conclusion, so your position is identifiable. You also attempt to explain why fame does not necessarily mean a lack of talent, using actors in India as an example. However, the response only partly develops the question: the first body paragraph focuses on competition and people being rejected, rather than directly showing whether genuine artistic talent is valued. The examples are broad and the reasoning is sometimes difficult to follow, especially the claim that people assume actors can succeed effortlessly. Develop each main point with a clearer explanation and a specific example, and address more directly how talent is recognised or overlooked. The required length is met; 12 words copied from the prompt were not counted.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, and phrases such as “As a result” and “In conclusion” help signal relationships between ideas. However, progression within the paragraphs is uneven: the discussion moves from competition to rejected aspiring actors, then to assumptions about famous people’s family wealth, without consistently showing how each point supports your disagreement. Some linking is repetitive, and references such as “this thinking” and “they” are not always immediately clear. Plan each paragraph around one central claim, then explain it and connect a relevant example to it. More precise referencing and a wider range of natural transitions would make the argument easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “competition,” “talented,” “famous,” and “work hard,” and you try to express ideas about achievement and public opinion. However, the range is limited and several spelling and word-choice errors make parts of the response difficult to understand, for example “compatetion,” “stuggrel,” and “effortless” where the intended meaning is unclear. Some phrases are also unnatural, such as “there is place for those persons” and “achieve something bigger need talented.” Build accuracy with common topic vocabulary and collocations before reaching for more complex expressions. Proofread spelling carefully, and choose words that express your intended meaning precisely.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You use both simple statements and attempts at longer sentences with reasons and results, including “because in modern world there is a lot of competition” and “As a result most of the people start to consider…”. However, the range is limited, and complex sentences often contain errors that make the relationships between ideas unclear. Examples include “those individuals with no talent become rich” after a general belief, “the most of the talents can not the grow,” and “Those persones who is best.” Agreement, articles, verb forms and sentence boundaries need more consistent control. Practise building accurate sentences with one main clause and a subordinate clause, then check subject–verb agreement and punctuation before adding further complexity.

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