Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-11-04

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some countries today, there is an attitude that 'anyone can do it' in the arts - music, literature, acting, art, etc. As a result, people with no talent become rich and famous and genuine talent is not valued or appreciated.

Do you agree or disagree?

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The growing influence fine arts has sparked various debates. This issue is significant because of its impact on both individual and communities. In some nation's nowadays, there is a believe that everyone can perform in music, acting and literature. So, citizens with no talent became rich and genuine talent not valued or lack somewhere else. I will partially agree with the view. In this essay i will express my view in subsequent paragraphs along with my personal opinion at the end and lead logical conclusion.

In order to state the point in favour of the first statement, the primary reason is that talent are based on two core factors first, by practice individuals can learn or acquire skills with the help of practice. Secondly, talent can be generminated by birth, but practice can be done so that perform good at particilar field. There are famous quote "practice makes man perfect"with hardwork, determination and practice they can achieve anything. In some cases humans use their power to make themselves famous personality.

On the other hand, people with no talent become rich and genuine talent is not valued. Firstly individuals make themself enough capable to take stand on right decision. If someone missued their money and power to bacame famous with zero talent we should aware citizens regarding such traps. Secondly, lack of resources and knowledge is also one of the reason. For instance, a survey supported by empricial evidences that majority of talent children born in low income families and unable to enhance their talent due to lack of resources.

In conclusion, although both statement holds valid points. I believe that genuine talented children were given appropriate chance to flourish in their specialised aspect and became a responsible citizen.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You give a relevant response and state a position—“I will partially agree”—then discuss both the possibility of developing ability through practice and the disadvantage faced by talented people with limited resources. However, the position is not fully clear: the first body paragraph mainly argues that practice can create skill, rather than directly addressing whether people without talent become rich and famous or whether genuine talent is undervalued. The second paragraph raises a relevant concern about unequal opportunity, but its survey example is vague and does not explain how this proves the task’s claim. The conclusion supports talented children receiving opportunities, but does not clearly restate your degree of agreement. Develop each main point with a specific, explained example and maintain a consistent answer to the question.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, two body paragraphs presenting contrasting points, and a conclusion. Phrases such as “On the other hand” help signal a change in direction. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow: the first body paragraph moves from practice to inborn talent and then to people using power to become famous without clearly connecting these ideas. The introduction also promises a “logical conclusion” rather than previewing the argument, and the conclusion does not clearly resolve the position. Some linking phrases, including “Firstly” and “Secondly,” feel mechanical, while references such as “both statement” are unclear. Organise each paragraph around one central claim, then explain and illustrate it before moving to the next point.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt topic-related vocabulary, including “genuine talent,” “determination,” “lack of resources,” and “specialised aspect.” These choices show an effort to discuss ability, fame, and opportunity. However, the range is limited and several inaccurate word choices or collocations make parts of the argument hard to understand, such as “talent are based on two core factors,” “talent can be generminated by birth,” and “missued their money and power.” Spelling errors such as “particilar,” “empricial,” and “bacame” also reduce clarity. Aim for precise, natural phrases and check word forms and spelling. For example, distinguish between “natural ability” and “skills developed through practice,” and use “exploit their wealth and influence” when describing people using power to gain fame.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You use some longer sentence forms, including a conditional structure in “If someone missued their money and power…,” and attempt to organise ideas with sequencing expressions. However, the range is limited, and errors occur frequently in basic sentence construction, agreement, articles, and verb forms. Examples include “individual and communities,” “talent are based,” “genuine talent not valued,” and “both statement holds.” The opening also contains a sentence fragment-like construction: “So, citizens with no talent became rich and genuine talent not valued or lack somewhere else.” Capitalisation and punctuation are inconsistent, as in lowercase “i” and the missing space before the quotation’s closing punctuation. Use shorter, complete sentences first, checking subject–verb agreement and ensuring each clause has a clear subject and verb; then add complex structures carefully.

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