Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-09-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the process for making a water clock.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

HOW TO BUILD YOUR OWN WATER CLOCK

Student answer (Band 4.0)

This digram reflects that about process for making a water clock this as 7 stages.

Overall, this is view informatic digram show about how to buily your own water clock firstly start with tap on however, end with empty and repeat process for timing things.

this digram start with first step turn on tap after this step move on cover hole with finger for water droping moreover, fill top bottle to overflow as well as fourth step is level constanty. straw fix with the help of glue .

fivty step is finger away form hole and platstic bottle neck cutt of syep six is levels per minute and last and final step is empty and repeat process for timming things.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, containing only 120 words. Consequently, the description of the process is severely under-developed. While the writer attempts to outline the seven stages of making a water clock, such as 'turn on tap', 'cover hole with finger', and 'empty and repeat process for timing things', the information is presented in a fragmented, list-like manner rather than a cohesive academic report. There is an attempt at an overview, but key features are poorly detailed and lack the extension required for higher bands. The word count penalty significantly impacts this score, placing the response firmly in the lower bands.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The text lacks proper paragraphing, consisting instead of a few erratic sentences thrown together as a single block. While some sequencing words and transitional markers are attempted, such as 'firstly start with', 'however', and 'after this step', their usage is often clumsy and incorrect. The logical progression of the process is obscured by poor sentence structure and weak cohesive ties, making the overall arrangement difficult to follow. References between sentences are frequently unclear, and the lack of a structured introduction, body, and conclusion hinders the organizational flow of the report.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is extremely basic, repetitive, and plagued by spelling and word-choice errors. Examples include 'digram' for diagram, 'buily' for build, 'droping' for dropping, 'fivty' for fifty, 'cutt of' for cut off, and 'timming' for timing. There is an attempt to use task-specific vocabulary such as 'tap', 'straw', and 'plastic bottle', but the overall lexical range is very limited. Errors such as 'level constanty' and 'levels per minute' show a lack of precision and awkward collocation, which frequently strains the reader's understanding.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

Grammatical control is weak throughout the response. There is a complete absence of complex sentence structures used accurately, and even basic sentence boundaries are frequently violated, resulting in run-on sentences and fragments like 'this digram start with first step turn on tap after this step move on cover hole with finger'. Punctuation is largely neglected, and capitalization is inconsistent. Errors in verb forms, prepositions, and word classes occur in almost every sentence, heavily impeding smooth communication and reflecting very limited grammatical range and accuracy.

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