Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-11-05

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some countries, it can be very difficult for people over the age of 50 to get good jobs, despite their experience.

What do you think are the causes of this problem, and what measures could be taken to solve it?

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

A Number of the countriesfor peoples are very very difficult get the job over the age of 50 it is very big problem in many countries i gree with this statement

A peoples when comeing your lifes 50 age when he/her are not take a godd job with epriens beacuse his/her age is old so what work can do people and people thinks is very bad beacause when people age is 50 when he/she can not for hard working because he/she's mucels or skelotan are not work properly inadtion her/his come in the senior citizen and countries rule is when people come in sineor citien so he/she not work liggely and other jobs.it is difficult and unofficially.he/her not strong or not preper mentaly or physically.so not worke properly therefor people over the age of 50 to get godd jobs is difficult.whit expriens.Job take jobs but not good it is a bad work like this nurse in hospital,secaurity,driver,and house worker all it not get godd job.

It problem's solution is when people over the age 50 so compnys are sholde give the godd job because all citezen mentaly or physically or saving condition is not good.so give the job,when people is made engiering or doctoring deggre and he/she if help in country's condition so he/she not reject the good job.he/she country's future.or help in countrys futureIf people with experiens when not reject the job give the good job because he/she help i compny or contrfys future.

In counclution when people can do the work so not reject the good job,or if people can not do the work and not with a experiens to reject the compny and hier the new generatin's people.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both causes and possible measures, and your position is broadly that age should not prevent capable, experienced people from being hired. You identify concerns about physical ability and employers’ preference for younger workers, then suggest that companies should offer suitable jobs to older applicants. However, the causes are not clearly separated or fully explained, and the proposed measures remain general. For example, “companies are should give the good job” does not explain how employers could assess ability fairly or adapt roles. The examples of nurses, security workers, drivers and house workers are listed without showing why these jobs are unsuitable or how they support your argument. Develop each main idea with a clear explanation and a relevant example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

Your response has a basic overall structure: an introduction, a paragraph about the problem, a paragraph proposing a solution, and a conclusion. This helps the reader recognise the main stages of your answer. However, progression within paragraphs is difficult to follow because several points are joined together without clear relationships, and ideas are repeated, such as the claim that people over 50 should receive good jobs. Linking expressions such as “because,” “so” and “therefore” are used, but they do not always show a clear logical connection. The conclusion also introduces a new condition about rejecting applicants who cannot do the work. Organise each body paragraph around one main point, explain it in sequence, and use clear sentence boundaries and references.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “experience,” “senior citizen,” “physically,” “company” and “future,” so the reader can identify the general subject. However, the range is basic and repetitive, and frequent spelling and word-choice errors strain understanding. Examples include “godd job,” “epriens,” “mucels,” “skelotan” and “liggely”; some intended meanings are difficult to identify. Phrases such as “a bad work” and “not strong or not preper mentaly” are also imprecise or unnatural. Build a reliable set of topic vocabulary and check spelling and collocations. More precise terms such as “age discrimination,” “physical demands” and “transferable skills” would help you express the causes and solutions clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to express causes and conditions using forms such as “when people come…” and “if people with experience…,” but sentence structures are very limited and these longer attempts are often faulty. Errors in verb forms, agreement, articles and sentence construction frequently make the meaning difficult to follow. For example, “A peoples when comeing your lifes 50 age” lacks a clear grammatical structure, while “companies are should give” combines incompatible verb forms. Several sentences run together, as in the final paragraph, making it hard to see where one idea ends and another begins. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with one clear subordinate clause. Check subject–verb agreement, verb forms and punctuation when editing.

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