Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some countries, it can be very difficult for people over the age of 50 to get good jobs, despite their experience.

What do you think are the causes of this problem, and what measures could be taken to solve it?

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

There is no deneying the fact that in some countries it can be very challenging for 50's people and above to get good jobs, despite their experience in many fields of life. This essay wil discuss causes of this problem and list different measures that could be taken to solve it.

To begin with, there are many causes for the diffeculty of people over the age of 50 to find better jobs. Firstly, they are less productive than others. In other words, people over 50 years old are too old to get good jobs, as they spend all of their energy working in their young periods they become less motivated to work again. For example, a man over 50 years old can't work 8 to 10 hours a day in different fields because he doesn't have the energy. As a result, many companies prefere young people for work as they are more productive and still have the energy to work. In addition, as time has advanced many good jobs require not just experience but knowledge is the main requirement to get better jobs. 50's people don.t have enough knowledge to get this good jobs. However, the new generation have enough energy to study and work for this requirements to get better jobs.

In terms of measures that could help to solve this problems, gouvernments may help 50's people by giving them monthly penssions (money). It is also possible to say that, gouvernments should provide some taxes for people at their young age and give them back at their retirements. As a result, people over the age of 50 don't need to work. Moreover, gouvernments may create work opportunities just for 50's people or over (old people) where they don't need to get good jobs to gt money. For instance, works that do not require too much energy to do it may help 50's people to be productive on it.

In conclusion, there are many causes that don't allow people over the age 50 to get good jobs, it is also true that there are different solutions to get out of this problem.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both parts of the question: you suggest causes, including employers’ preference for younger workers and older applicants’ perceived lack of up-to-date knowledge, and propose pensions and age-specific work opportunities. The response is relevant, but the causes and solutions are not developed evenly. The claim that people over 50 are less productive because they have used up their energy is broad and unsupported, and the discussion of knowledge does not explain why older workers might lack it or how this affects hiring. The pension proposal also reduces the need to work rather than directly helping people obtain good jobs. To strengthen the response, explain the causes more carefully and make each measure directly address employment barriers, with a specific example or rationale.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The essay has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction, a paragraph on causes, a paragraph on measures, and a conclusion. Signposting such as “To begin with,” “In addition,” and “In terms of measures” helps readers follow the main sections. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes mechanical, with repeated “As a result” and “For example,” and some links between claims are not fully clear. For instance, the move from older workers’ energy to companies’ preference for young people is understandable, but the explanation relies on repeating the same point rather than extending it. The conclusion restates the topic without summarising the main causes and solutions. Use clearer references and develop each paragraph around a more explicit sequence of claim, explanation, and example.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the main ideas, including “productive,” “motivated,” “requirements,” “pensions,” and “work opportunities.” However, the range is limited and several noticeable spelling, word-choice, and collocation errors make the writing less natural. Examples include “diffeculty,” “gouvernments,” and “penssions,” as well as “provide some taxes,” which does not express the intended idea clearly. Repeated phrases such as “good jobs” and “people over 50” also restrict variety. Build a more precise vocabulary for employment and policy, and check spelling and common word combinations. For example, distinguish between paying taxes, receiving a pension, and providing financial support.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a mixture of simple sentences and longer structures, including clauses introduced by “as,” “because,” and “where.” However, the range is limited, and complex sentences are often faulty; errors occur frequently enough to make some sentences difficult to follow. For example, “as they spend all of their energy working in their young periods they become less motivated” has unclear clause structure, while “50’s people don.t have enough knowledge to get this good jobs” contains problems with possessive/plural forms and sentence punctuation. There are also errors in agreement and articles, as in “this problems” and “a man … can’t work … because he doesn’t have the energy.” Practise accurate sentence boundaries and basic agreement first, then use subordinate clauses with clear subjects and verbs.

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