Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some countries, it can be very difficult for people over the age of 50 to get good jobs, despite their experience.

What do you think are the causes of this problem, and what measures could be taken to solve it?

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In many countries it very diffcult to finding employment become incresingly for over 50 age, even if they have such good experiance. The problem is mainley caused by age discrimnition and technological changes. However, several steps need to take how to solve this issue.

There are several problem face it, why older people struggleto find job. Firstly, some employer believe on that younger people have more energetic and they are much faster, also they belive these are know how to use this modren technolgy. Secondly, technolgical devolpment have changed the workplace. As a result, some older individuals may find job it will be very diffcult to get job to adapt with them with new software and digital system. Consequitley, employers may consider them less suitbale for know position and continue it for longterm and their valuable experiance.

There are the varous way of this problem face that older people in this modren era. Goverment need to make strict rule and regulation for this type of companines to prevent on them. Also these compaines will give special training give to older people and give modren era demand courses what you need in future and what are risingley. Although that experiance will be not discourage. So the people will be not face that problem in future career and this strong experiance will be not disrupted.

In conclusion, age discrimanition and difficulties adapting to modren technlogy are the main reason why over 50 people is finding jobs. Nevertheless, goverment is not prevent any rule regulation and profeesonal training can help them on his future career.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both parts of the question by identifying age discrimination and difficulty adapting to technology as causes, then proposing employer training and government regulation. These ideas are relevant, and the conclusion restates the main points. However, the response only partially develops them: for example, the claim that employers prefer younger workers because they are “more energetic” is not supported with a specific explanation or example, and the proposed rules are not clearly described. The training measure is also vague; explaining what skills older workers would learn and how this would improve their job prospects would make the solution more convincing. Your overall position is present, but it would be clearer and more fully supported if each cause and measure were explained in detail.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, a paragraph on causes, one on solutions, and a conclusion. Sequencing words such as “Firstly,” “Secondly,” “As a result,” and “In conclusion” help signal the stages of the argument. However, connections between some ideas are difficult to follow, particularly in “Consequitley, employers may consider them less suitable for know position and continue it for longterm.” The reference of “them” and “it” is unclear, and several sentences repeat the same point about older workers facing difficulty. The solutions paragraph also moves quickly from government rules to training without explaining their relationship. Clearer links between each claim and its explanation, alongside more precise referencing, would make the progression easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant topic vocabulary, including “age discrimination,” “technological development,” “digital system,” and “professional training,” so the reader can identify the subject and main ideas. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, sometimes making meaning difficult to understand. Examples include “believe on that,” “know position,” and “what are risingley”; these do not express the intended ideas clearly. Spelling errors such as “experiance,” “modren,” and “technolgy” are also frequent and reduce precision. Aim to learn common phrases for employment and workplace change, and check spelling and word forms carefully. More accurate, natural phrasing would help you express your relevant ideas with greater clarity.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a cause-and-effect structure in “As a result, some older individuals may find…” and a contrast introduced by “Although.” However, complex attempts are often faulty, and errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence construction can make parts difficult to understand. For example, “it very difficult to finding employment become increasingly” does not form a complete, clear clause, while “government is not prevent” has an incorrect verb pattern. There are also problems with plural and singular agreement in “the main reason why over 50 people is finding jobs.” Practise building accurate basic clauses first, then combine them using subordinate clauses. Careful proofreading for subject–verb agreement and verb forms would improve clarity.

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