Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some countries, it can be very difficult for people over the age of 50 to get good jobs, despite their experience.

What do you think are the causes of this problem, and what measures could be taken to solve it?

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

This topic is about jobs difficulties for people whose age over 50 years.

Yes this is true in most countries their is big problem to get job over 50 years even some one have good experience. This is because of some countries rule to retired people from work whose age above 50, because they think above 50 they have not enougf energy, potentaial and cretical thinking.So that's why like that people are not able for job even they have good experience.

But according to me it's wrong to analyze or determine some one because of their age. companies should give chance for that people, they should give oppertunites, they should take interview if they relize that person have potential and is good for our company or organization then they should hire them.

Also big companies should hire like that people in hier posts rather then jounier or entry level posts. They should take their interview if they find that person have enougf or good experience then they sould hire them in hier post like supervision and management because they have higher experince about their field and they can guide or supervise their juniors very easyly because of their experience.

So, here also government should take action related that age of people and should provide facilities like free medical and also they should have some seats as goverment level for that people if govermet find if someone still have potential and eager to work then they also should hire them and facilitate them.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both parts of the question: you suggest that employers may assume older workers lack energy or critical thinking, and propose fairer recruitment, senior roles, and government support. Your position is clear in statements such as “it’s wrong to analyze or determine someone because of their age.” However, the causes are explained mainly as one general assumption and a retirement rule, without showing how these operate in different workplaces. The measures are relevant, but some need fuller explanation: for example, “free medical” is mentioned without explaining how it would help employers hire older people. Develop each cause and measure with a specific example or a clearer explanation of its likely effect.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a coherent overall arrangement: it introduces the issue, discusses causes, presents employer-focused measures, and ends with government action. Paragraphing helps distinguish these stages, and connectors such as “But,” “Also,” and “So” make the broad progression visible. At times, however, the links feel mechanical, and ideas within paragraphs are joined in long sequences rather than clearly separated. The repeated “they should” also makes the recommendations less easy to follow, while “here also government” does not clearly connect the final proposal to the previous point. Use more precise referencing and organise each paragraph around one main idea, followed by its explanation or example.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “experience,” “potential,” “supervision,” and “management,” so the main ideas are generally understandable. However, the range is limited and several word-choice, collocation, and spelling errors make the writing less clear or natural. For instance, “jobs difficulties” and “higher posts” are not idiomatic in this context, while “cretical thinking,” “oppertunites,” and “experince” are misspelled. Repeated use of “good” and “people” also limits precision. Build a more accurate set of employment-related phrases and check spelling; this will help you express distinctions between recruitment, promotion, retirement, and workplace support more clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, including conditional structures such as “if they find that person have enough or good experience then they should hire them.” The overall meaning can usually be followed, but errors in sentence construction and grammatical forms occur across the response. Examples include “people whose age over 50,” “some countries rule to retired people,” and “that person have potential”; these need clearer clause structure and agreement. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly where sentences run together, as in “critical thinking.So that’s why.” Practise accurate subject–verb agreement, articles, and complete clauses, then use full stops to separate ideas. This will make your arguments easier to read while retaining sentence variety.

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