Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some countries, it can be very difficult for people over the age of 50 to get good jobs, despite their experience.

What do you think are the causes of this problem, and what measures could be taken to solve it?

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In many countries , it can be most difficult for people at the age of 50 to get a good jobs , by their experience. I think its a very common problem in mordern time and i think its should be solved.

Many kind of people do not get proper jobs. For this reason they face many financial problem and they were unemployed. Among them most of the people are 50 years old .They do not have good job because they are not expert in any kind of job. Thats why they donot get good job . Most of the people believe that young people is better then old people for working. For example my uncle is 40 years old he feels very financial problem so he find a good job for long days but he do not get good job in any companys . He feels very stress for this reasons . Every company told him he donot have any kind of jobs because he is already old people he says he donot done their work properly. So similarly who is 50 years they donot get propre jobs.

In addition, At that time many people face this problem , but on one came to help them . Every company should give jobs opportunity for old people otherwise they always feels stress and financial problems .So i think government should take proper steps for old people so that they get proper job that they need. As a result they lead a happy life with their family.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the problem and give a relevant general view that it should be addressed. The response also offers a possible measure: companies should provide job opportunities for older people, with government action to support this. However, the causes are not clearly explained. The claim that older applicants are “not expert in any kind of job” conflicts with the prompt’s emphasis on their experience, and the example about your 40-year-old uncle does not clearly show why people over 50 are rejected. The proposed solutions are also broad and not explained in practical terms. To strengthen the response, explain specific causes, such as age discrimination or employers’ assumptions about adaptability, then develop targeted measures and show how they would help.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic paragraph structure: an introduction, a paragraph about the problem, and a final paragraph suggesting action. Some links, such as “For example” and “As a result,” help signal relationships between ideas. However, progression within the main paragraph is difficult to follow: it moves from unemployment and financial problems to lack of expertise, employers’ preferences, and the uncle’s experience without clearly connecting these points. The final paragraph also repeats the idea of financial stress rather than extending the solution. Linking phrases such as “In addition” do not always introduce a distinct point. Organise the body around one clear cause and one developed solution, and use pronouns and transitions to make the relationships between claims explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use a small set of relevant terms, including “financial problem,” “unemployed,” “company,” and “government,” so the general topic is understandable. However, vocabulary is limited and repetitive, particularly the repeated use of “good job,” “proper jobs,” and “old people.” Several word choices or combinations are inaccurate, such as “by their experience,” “find a good job for long days,” and “feels very stress,” which can make the intended meaning less clear. Spelling and word forms also need attention, including “mordern,” “propre,” and “companys.” Build a more precise range for discussing employment and age discrimination, and check collocations and spelling when revising.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

Most sentences use simple patterns, and you attempt longer sentences with reasons and examples. However, the range is limited, and errors occur frequently enough to make some sentences difficult to interpret. For example, “Most of the people believe that young people is better then old people for working” has problems with subject–verb agreement and sentence construction; “he do not get good job” also shows errors in agreement and articles. Tense and clause formation are inconsistent in the account of your uncle, while punctuation and spacing are often unreliable. Practise accurate simple sentences first, especially agreement, articles, and verb forms, then add controlled complex sentences using “because,” “although,” or “which.”

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