Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some countries, it can be very difficult for people over the age of 50 to get good jobs, despite their experience.

What do you think are the causes of this problem, and what measures could be taken to solve it?

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In many countries, It can be very arduous for individuals more than age of 50 to have good jobs, behaind their experience. the essay wiil descuss the problem and give some sulutions.

People argue that individuals over age 50 is hard for them to get good jobs now, And this is becase people when the reach 50 they will not have iebelty to work many hours in a day or they can not do hard works because the becam old not like yungsters the are active and they can work many hours in a day and also can do better in the work.

To solve this maybe the should reduce the houers of works for old people or just make them work remotly, And the are many good jobs that didnt offer more efforts cand great for people over 50 as a teacher or derector or seler of a prodect owner ...,or maybe if the still have effort to work but they didnt fund a job the shoul do ther owne bisnuss in what they already studied or worked because now the have experience and this will helped them.

To cunlud age never determened the abelty of a person in work or anything in life in may perspectif i see that not all people the same and we must give old individuals chances because old person dosent nececery mean he cant work or he cant have effort to do something he may be better than a yung person how knowes.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both parts of the question: you suggest that employers may doubt older workers’ capacity for long hours or demanding work, and propose reduced hours, remote work, suitable roles, or self-employment. Your conclusion also makes your position clear that age should not determine a person’s ability. However, the causes are narrow and largely presented as assumptions about older people, rather than examining why employers may reject experienced applicants. The proposed measures are relevant but are mostly listed, with little explanation of how they would change hiring practices or help workers find jobs. Develop one or two causes and solutions with specific reasoning or an example, and make the link between each measure and the problem explicit.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, a paragraph on causes, a paragraph on solutions, and a conclusion. This helps the reader identify the main stages of your answer. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow, especially where several suggestions are joined in one long sentence, such as the list of jobs and the idea of starting a business. Linking words such as “And,” “or,” and “because” are repeated or used mechanically, and some references, including “this” and “they,” are not always clear. Use shorter, more focused sentences, organise each paragraph around one main point, and use linking phrases to show cause, contrast, and result more precisely.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some vocabulary relevant to employment and the topic, including “experience,” “remote,” “teacher,” and “business,” so the main ideas can generally be understood. However, the range is limited, and frequent spelling errors and inaccurate word choices sometimes make the reader work to interpret your meaning. Examples include “behaind,” “sulutions,” “efforts,” and “determened”; phrases such as “good jobs” and “hard works” are also imprecise or unnatural in context. Build a more accurate set of employment-related expressions and check spelling carefully. Choosing precise terms for the causes and measures will help you explain your ideas without relying on repeated general words.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences with reasons, for example, “because people when the reach 50…” This shows an effort to connect ideas, but complex sentences are often difficult to follow because clauses are not formed or punctuated clearly. There are frequent errors in agreement and verb forms, as in “individuals over age 50 is hard” and “the should reduce,” as well as missing or incorrect articles and sentence boundaries. These patterns sometimes obscure the intended meaning. Practise building accurate basic sentences first, then add one subordinate clause at a time. Check subject–verb agreement, verb forms, articles, and punctuation when revising.

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