Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some countries, it can be very difficult for people over the age of 50 to get good jobs, despite their experience.

What do you think are the causes of this problem, and what measures could be taken to solve it?

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

In selected areas of the world, people over 50 years of age could find decent jobs very hard despite of their work backgrounds. I think this is due to their limited physical capability due to their age. I think the better way to solve this problem is to open jobs that are relevant to their age, backgrounds and potential.

Most of the companies today prefers employees who are young and energetic, they even put an age limit to their job postings making it limited to the younger ones only. This is why people who are older are having a difficult time to find decent jobs. For instance, in a hospital, the human resources opens a job listing for nurses but it has an age limit of 25 to 35 only, thinking that those people in that bracket are more technical and physically capable of the job rather than the older ones.

I think the better way to solve this kind of problem is to open a work that is relevant to their age and work background. Because, honestly, there are things that a 50-year old employee can do that younger ones cannot. They possess traits or skills honed from their experiences that can help the company.

In conclusion, despite of their age they can be as useful as the younger ones. People over 50 years of age should be given an equal opportunity as what younger generation have. Though they may be much weaker in terms of physical capabilities, they can contribute in other areas like intellectually and wisdom.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both causes and solutions and maintain a clear view that older workers should have equal opportunities. The explanation that employers favour “young and energetic” staff is relevant, and the hospital vacancy example makes age discrimination concrete. You also identify older workers’ experience and skills as potential contributions. However, the cause is narrowed mainly to assumptions about physical ability, while other plausible factors—such as outdated skills, hiring costs, or age bias—are not explored. The proposed solution, opening jobs suited to older workers’ backgrounds, is relevant but remains general: explain how employers or governments could implement it, for example through age-neutral recruitment or retraining. Some ideas are therefore less fully developed than others.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, a paragraph explaining the problem, a paragraph proposing a solution, and a conclusion. The progression from employer preferences to an example and then to older workers’ strengths is easy to follow. Linking phrases such as “For instance” and “In conclusion” help signal the stages of the argument. To make the organisation more effective, develop the relationship between the stated cause and the solution more explicitly, and avoid repeating the same point about age and equal opportunity in the introduction and conclusion. The opening paragraph also combines the cause and solution very briefly, so a more focused thesis would guide the reader more clearly through the essay.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “age limit,” “job postings,” “work background,” and “physically capable,” so the main ideas are understandable. There are also attempts at more specific phrasing, such as “traits or skills honed from their experiences.” However, several expressions are imprecise or unnatural, including “selected areas of the world,” “decent jobs very hard,” and “open a work.” Repetition of “age,” “jobs,” and “younger” also limits the range. Aim for more natural collocations and precise terms for the issue, such as age discrimination, recruitment practices, and transferable skills. This would make the argument sound more fluent and appropriately formal.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You use both simple sentences and some longer structures, including the relative clause in “employees who are young and energetic” and the contrast in “Though they may be much weaker…”. Most of the meaning remains clear, but some grammatical errors recur. For example, “Most of the companies today prefers” has a subject–verb agreement error, and “despite of their age” uses an incorrect preposition pattern. The sentence beginning “Because, honestly” is a fragment, while “they can contribute in other areas like intellectually and wisdom” has an unclear grammatical construction. Work on agreement, complete sentence formation, and parallel phrasing. More accurate control of these patterns would strengthen the range you are already attempting.

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