Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some countries, it can be very difficult for people over the age of 50 to get good jobs, despite their experience.

What do you think are the causes of this problem, and what measures could be taken to solve it?

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In few countrier, people want to get better jobs in the age of 50 but dont.Because they have no strenght for work and also in this age they have to be rest and most of the companies wants yong staff.

However, many people want a bettet job in the age of 50 they need for this, but they dont get even they have experience, because companies want to hier young people they want to make their companies more efficient. The old people have not modren skills that companies expect from the employe, and also they want to get high salaries because of their experience and the yougsters work on low wages.

Some companies dont hier old people becausse of their age they have no controle on their anger and on the other side youngsters have to start their cariere they have not chanve for mistake. The old people have no skills of computer and other things that are used in the modern era.

In my opinion, we can solve this problem to argue the government for making a rule for old people, companies should have to start training setup for thoes who have not skills like computer and others and also ther have to give jobs to old people to their experience.

In conclusiom, the ols people face the difficulities about to get high salaries and lack of modren skillls , companies should have to focus on this.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You address both causes and possible measures, and your position is visible: you suggest that employers prefer younger workers and that training and government rules could help older applicants. However, the response only partially develops the task. The causes—such as assumptions about older workers’ strength, computer skills, salary expectations and anger—are listed, but several are asserted without explanation or supporting examples. The proposed measures are also unclear: “argue the government” does not explain what action people should take, and the training proposal needs more detail about who would provide it and how it would help. The response is 12 words below the required minimum, which further limits the space available to develop these ideas.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an opening, paragraphs discussing causes, a paragraph proposing solutions, and a conclusion. This helps the reader identify the main stages of your answer. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes unclear, and ideas are often joined mechanically with “and also” or “because.” For example, the paragraph beginning “Some companies dont hier old people” moves from anger to younger workers’ career needs and then computer skills without clearly showing how these points connect. The conclusion repeats the main concerns rather than drawing the discussion together. Use clearer topic sentences, group related causes together, and make links between each cause and its proposed solution explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “experience,” “efficient,” “high salaries,” “training,” and “modern skills.” These terms make your main subject understandable. However, the range is limited and several words or phrases are repeated, particularly “old people,” “youngsters,” and “skills.” Frequent spelling errors, such as “countrier,” “strenght,” “modren,” and “difficulities,” make the writing less clear and reduce the accuracy of your vocabulary. Some expressions are also unnatural or imprecise, such as “in the age of 50,” “training setup,” and “have no controle on their anger.” Build a more precise range of employment-related phrases and check spelling and collocations carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple sentences and longer sentences with reasons, using forms such as “because” and “even they have experience.” This shows an effort to connect ideas, but the range remains limited and many sentence patterns are inaccurate. For example, “many people want a bettet job in the age of 50 they need for this” joins clauses without correct structure, while “most of the companies wants” has subject–verb disagreement. Articles and prepositions are also often missing or incorrect, as in “in few countries” and “at the age of 50.” Punctuation, especially sentence boundaries, needs attention. Practise building accurate sentences first, then combine them with subordinate clauses and check agreement, articles and punctuation.

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