Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some countries, it can be very difficult for people over the age of 50 to get good jobs, despite their experience.

What do you think are the causes of this problem, and what measures could be taken to solve it?

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Most of the countries of the world and their people are against of those people who is over the age of 50 and also have some experienced but want to do some jobs at this age.

The reason that most of the public is against of them beacuse of many reasons, first is old people does not have potential or energy like young people and this is the biggest drawback for that. Moreover, Old people does not well known about the modern technology and also they dose not known about the how to use this technology. Many time those people have many problems related to their health and this may cause him to be an unemployed.

However, There are some solutions like, Government should have to provide such type of jobs were people age of 50 fit their self in this. Also general public or company should have to provide such type of jobs where need of technology are very less or no need of technology.

If i talk about the company where i get employnment, in this company one older person is also work, however their work is not technical, director gave him permission to do non-technical work with limited working time which is i think the best example of this cause.

In conclusion, Many time there are some difficulties company or person face when they hired old age people to work, However company or person should have to give him or her such type of non technical work where they fit their self with the limited working hours so they can get good remuneration.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both parts of the question by identifying possible causes—lower energy, limited familiarity with modern technology, and health problems—and proposing suitable roles and reduced working hours. Your workplace example, in which an older employee does non-technical work for limited hours, helps make the proposed solution concrete. However, some points are asserted rather than explained: for instance, you do not show why employers generally prefer younger workers, or how governments and companies could put your suggestions into practice. The conclusion repeats the recommendation but does not add much to the discussion. Develop each cause and measure with a brief explanation or example, and make clear that the issue is employers’ reluctance to hire older people rather than public opposition in general.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, a paragraph on causes, one on solutions, a personal example, and a conclusion. Linking expressions such as “Moreover,” “However,” and “In conclusion” help signal the stages of your argument. The progression is generally understandable, although the personal example is separated from the solutions it supports, and the conclusion largely repeats the previous paragraph. Some connections are also unclear, particularly “the best example of this cause,” which seems to refer to a solution rather than a cause. Group the example with the relevant measure and use clearer references to connect ideas. This would make the organisation feel less mechanical and the argument easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use vocabulary relevant to employment and the topic, including “modern technology,” “non-technical work,” “limited working time,” and “remuneration.” These choices show that you can communicate the main ideas, but the range is limited and several phrases are inaccurate or unnatural, sometimes making the reader pause. For example, “against of those people” and “get employment” do not express the intended meaning naturally, while “old people” is repeated where “older workers” would be more appropriate. Spelling errors such as “beacuse” and “employnment” also reduce accuracy. Build a wider set of precise employment-related expressions and check spelling and collocations when revising.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including a cause-and-effect structure with “Many time those people have many problems related to their health and this may cause him to be an unemployed.” However, errors in agreement, verb forms, articles, and sentence construction occur across the response and sometimes make relationships between ideas difficult to follow. Examples include “people who is,” “old people does not,” “one older person is also work,” and “director gave him permission.” The final sentence also contains a long, loosely connected clause. Practise forming accurate subject–verb patterns and use shorter sentences when a complex structure becomes difficult to control. More reliable grammar would make your ideas clearer.

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