Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some countries, it can be very difficult for people over the age of 50 to get good jobs, despite their experience.

What do you think are the causes of this problem, and what measures could be taken to solve it?

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

nowdays , in sertain countries around the world , old people have problems in finding good jobs despite of their skills and experiences . from my perspective i think this may be because of so many reasons lets get into them .

one of the main reasons is health problems , old people struggel with their mental and physical heath work pressure can effect them negatively and automatiquely that dosnt lead to a prefitional work this can be seen in so many situations . another important reason is giving and letting the chance for the new generation to learn and work in other words a country with active hand power develop faster and has an positif impact on the economy growth . a clea example of this is a middel age persons work for a whole week with a high level of energy insteat age people cant work with the same energy level which means less production and less benifit .

FINALLY TO SLOVE THOSE PROBLEMS AND TO ADRESS THE ISSUES , THE GOVERNMENTS SHOULD TAKE MEASURES TO AGE PEOPLE AND MEET THEIR NEEDS , INSTEAD OF MAKING THEM WORK , THEY SHOULD PAY THEM SOME MONEY AND TAKE CARE OF THEIR MENTAL AND PHYSICAL HEALTH WITH FREE CURE AND SOME HELPS IN THE EVERY DAY LIFE NEEDS , THIS SAVE A CONSIDERABLE AMOUNT OF TIME AND LET THE SPACE FO THE NEW GENERATION TO WORK . LIKE THIS EVERYONE CAN BENIFIT EVEN THE COUNTRY ECO

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify possible causes—health pressures and employers’ preference for younger workers—and suggest government support, including financial help and healthcare. However, the response only partially answers the task: the causes are briefly stated, and the proposed measures do not clearly explain how people over 50 could obtain good jobs. The claim that older workers cannot maintain the same energy level is broad and unsupported, while paying them to stop working does not directly address employment discrimination or make use of their experience. The response also falls four words short of the required minimum. Develop each cause with a clear explanation and example, then propose practical measures such as retraining, anti-age-discrimination rules, or flexible work.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

There is some organisation: the opening introduces the issue, the next paragraph gives causes, and the final paragraph presents measures. Basic signposting such as “one of the main reasons,” “another important reason,” and “finally” helps readers follow the broad structure. However, progression within paragraphs is uneven. The discussion moves from health problems to national economic growth without clearly connecting the ideas, and the final paragraph combines several recommendations in one long sequence. Some links, including “in other words,” do not clearly express the relationship between the preceding and following points. Use separate, focused paragraphs for causes and solutions, and connect each claim to its explanation with precise referencing and linking.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “work pressure,” “active hand power,” “economy growth,” and “mental and physical health.” There is also an attempt to express more specific ideas, such as “production” and “benefit.” However, the range is limited and several spelling and word-choice errors make parts difficult to understand, for example “prefitional work,” “middel age persons,” and “age people.” Some combinations are unnatural, such as “active hand power” and “free cure.” These issues fit a response with a minimally adequate but noticeably inaccurate vocabulary range. Build a bank of accurate employment terms and check spelling and collocations; for example, use “workforce,” “economic growth,” and “medical treatment.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, including a cause-and-effect structure with “which means less production and less benefit.” However, complex sentences are often faulty or difficult to follow, and errors occur frequently. For example, “old people struggle with their mental and physical health work pressure can affect them” joins separate ideas without correct punctuation or a linking structure. There are also problems with articles, agreement, and sentence boundaries, as in “a middle age persons work” and the extended final sentence beginning “the governments should take measures.” Capitalisation and punctuation are inconsistent. Practise building accurate sentences with one main idea, then combine them using controlled clauses and correct punctuation.

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