Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-07-29

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some countries, it can be very difficult for people over the age of 50 to get good jobs, despite their experience.

What do you think are the causes of this problem, and what measures could be taken to solve it?

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Older workers often face problem despite having a good year of experience the company wants a young people who are energetic and fast learner and the person who adapts the things fast. This problem is done by age discrimination and rapid change of technology. These problem can be solved by government's by implementing strict policies and rules and regulations.

The major problem that is the age and the adaptability of the work. The aged people are not the fast learners. There is no issue of work experience but the technology is becoming advanced and the people will take time to learn it the company will not get benefit from aged people. The work burden also can not be handle by the aged people and overtime will also not be possible for aged people. Many industries are using artificial intelligence because of these also the aged will face problem. The young employees are familiar with the technology they can use it in a easy way and they can adapt the technology fast as compared to aged people.

Several measures issue to solve the problems.

The government should introduce new policies for the aged employees as the want to work in the company they should also tell companies to keep some vacancies reserve for aged employee. As they have a good experience of their work. They can also use their expertise in some areas like suggestions, how to deal with some problems, etc. They have also work in companies for long period so they have some ideas about how to deal with the problems. There should be anti discrimination policies also.

In conclusion, the people above 50 age faces a very difficulties to find the job. There should be anti discrimination policy as the people can work and earn money and can help to support there family.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt: causes (age discrimination, technology, and physical demands) and solutions (government policies and anti-discrimination laws). However, the development is somewhat limited. The ideas are presented in a repetitive manner, particularly regarding the perceived inability of older workers to learn technology. To reach a higher band, you should provide more specific examples or evidence to support your claims rather than relying on generalizations. The position is clear, but the depth of analysis is insufficient for a higher score, as the arguments remain at a surface level throughout the essay.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the progression of ideas is often mechanical. There is an over-reliance on simple cohesive devices, and some transitions are awkward or missing, such as the abrupt start to the third paragraph ('Several measures issue to solve the problems'). Referencing is sometimes unclear, and the logical flow between sentences is occasionally disrupted by grammatical errors. Using a wider range of linking words (e.g., 'consequently', 'furthermore', 'in contrast') would improve the overall coherence of the response.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks the range and precision required for a higher band. You rely on basic terms like 'good', 'problem', and 'things' repeatedly. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'good year of experience' (should be 'years of experience') and 'the person who adapts the things fast' (should be 'adapts quickly'). While the meaning is generally clear, the lack of variety and the presence of errors in word formation prevent a higher score. You should aim to use more academic collocations and precise terminology.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but the accuracy is inconsistent. There are frequent errors in subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'the people above 50 age faces'), article usage, and sentence fragments. Some sentences are poorly constructed, which occasionally forces the reader to re-read to understand the intended meaning. While you attempt complex structures, they are often faulty. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and ensuring that your verb tenses and pluralization are consistent throughout the text.

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