Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-07-31

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some countries, it can be very difficult for people over the age of 50 to get good jobs, despite their experience.

What do you think are the causes of this problem, and what measures could be taken to solve it?

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

In some states, indivisduals above 50 faced hurdles for getting jobs regaurdless of their expericences. This problem causes because these people are not familier with new tecnology and have experience with old tecnology, the other caise of this is that most of the compainies preffer youngsters as their employes theirfore it become an obstacle for getting jobs.

The main prevention for this issue is to train these affectives to learn new technology and add this to their resume.

Firstly, the main reason of not having jobs for above 50 is that most of them are technophobes theirfore companies and orgainization not preffer them to be a part of them. These people have still tge old stratiges regaurding the growth of the particular sector they are in. In many different companies the retairement age is reduced from 60 years to 50 because most of them belives that the youth have much efficient ideas and they are know how to utilize the technology in their benifits furthermore, the young people are more concious about their jobs and interests on tge other hand the old people are still stuck in the past use those old ideas in every field.

The main prevention for this issue is to train the affectives on different technology items and they have to learn new still to ehnace their experience they should register for different online couses regaurding their field. They should mordenize their resume to combat with the youngsters. Compaines should also train their hiring department to focus on the skills instead of the age.

In conclusion, old people should inhance their skill to become a part of the morden age and companies should start looking for the skill instead of critisizing age differences

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt: causes and solutions. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited and repetitive. For instance, the argument regarding technology is mentioned in the introduction, the first body paragraph, and the second body paragraph without significant expansion. The ideas are relevant, but the lack of specific examples or deeper analysis prevents a higher score. The position is clear, but the overall development is basic and lacks the depth required for a higher band.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. For example, 'theirfore' is used repeatedly and often incorrectly, and transitions like 'furthermore' and 'on the other hand' are used to link ideas, but the flow between sentences is sometimes disjointed. The referencing is occasionally unclear, and the paragraphing, while present, does not always logically group the ideas effectively.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary range is limited and repetitive. There are numerous spelling errors throughout the text, such as 'indivisduals', 'regaurdless', 'expericences', 'tecnology', 'compainies', 'preffer', 'employes', 'orgainization', 'tge', 'stratiges', 'retairement', 'belives', 'concious', 'couses', 'mordenize', and 'inhance'. These errors are frequent and occasionally make the text difficult to read. While the student attempts to use topic-specific vocabulary, the high frequency of spelling mistakes and the limited range of synonyms significantly impact the score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay relies heavily on simple sentence structures. While there are attempts at complex sentences, they are often marred by grammatical errors, such as 'This problem causes because' (incorrect passive/active voice) and 'they are know how to utilize' (incorrect verb form). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with several run-on sentences and missing commas. The frequency of errors is high, which occasionally impedes the reader's understanding of the intended meaning.

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