Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-08-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some countries, it can be very difficult for people over the age of 50 to get good jobs, despite their experience.

What do you think are the causes of this problem, and what measures could be taken to solve it?

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

In this contemporary era, where there is a subsequent competition for getting job especially for old age people, rather than having a respected number experience, still they finished as an unemployed. The major causes, and the solutions have been discussed in further paragraphs.

To begin with, nowadays freshers are the first priority of enterprises due to having youngsters in the company, who can work effectively. The industries are not in interested of hiring individuals of 50 plus age this is because, they do not have enough knowledge of current technology advancement. However, companies might trouble ate time when they require a person who is able to handle the critical situation with relevant information without creating more trouble. Moreover, newcomers are not consistent for their job, to get higher wage they swift from one to another organization within 2 or 3 years to get more incentives, but in the case of old age individuals they are very loyal to one company. For example, in Japan, 80 percent of newly graduated students resign from their first job after 2 years to get better salary in other enterprise.

To solve this, the senior position like the CEO- Chief Executive Officer ought to only old age people who have a appreciating number of experience. Furthermore, companies should reserve some seats only for old individuals in account of reduce the unemployment among them. One more innovative thing is, enterprises can hire them as a freelancer to give them work of some important projects, as a result senior citizens will not get work burden and earn sufficient amount of money. For example, the Deloitte- an American IT company, gave contract projects to their employees who were more than 50 in age, to gave them less stress and flexibility of work.

To conclude, if companies not show interest to give job to old age individuals they may suffer form lack of experience; freshers have only bookish knowledge so they cannot handle every position. However, organizations can give freelancing or only senior level position to people with the age 50 plus, which give them less work and make them safe from money less.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt: causes and solutions. The ideas are relevant, such as the preference for younger workers due to technological adaptability and the issue of employee turnover. However, the development is somewhat uneven. While the example regarding Japan is specific, the discussion on solutions, such as reserving seats for older workers, is a bit simplistic and lacks depth. The position is clear throughout, but the argument could be strengthened by exploring the economic or social implications more thoroughly. Overall, it meets the requirements of the task well enough to be considered a solid attempt.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into clear paragraphs, each with a distinct focus. There is a logical progression of ideas from the introduction to the causes, solutions, and conclusion. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'To begin with', 'Moreover', and 'To conclude', though some transitions feel a bit mechanical or slightly unnatural (e.g., 'In this contemporary era'). Referencing is generally clear, although some sentences are slightly disjointed, which occasionally affects the flow of the argument. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the different stages of the response.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is adequate for the task, allowing the student to convey their ideas clearly. There are attempts to use less common vocabulary, such as 'contemporary era', 'incentives', and 'freelancer'. However, there are several instances of awkward phrasing and word choice errors, such as 'trouble ate time', 'appreciating number of experience', and 'money less'. These errors do not impede communication, but they do limit the precision of the writing. A wider range of collocations and more accurate word choices would be needed to reach a higher band.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The student uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with verb forms, prepositions, and sentence construction (e.g., 'if companies not show interest', 'suffer form lack of experience', 'to gave them less stress'). Punctuation is also inconsistent in places. While the errors are noticeable, they rarely prevent the reader from understanding the intended message. To improve, the student should focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of infinitive versus past tense forms after 'to'.

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