Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-08-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some countries, it can be very difficult for people over the age of 50 to get good jobs, despite their experience.

What do you think are the causes of this problem, and what measures could be taken to solve it?

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In this contemporary society, it is often argued that, individuals who are in there 50's are going through difficult times for not getting a good occupation while having good experiance of that job.i believe that,a good skill and experiance is overlooked by the companies managers for selecting employees for there company ..although age is just a number but theexperiance they hold is undeinable and for areputated compay it is always consider to have agreat skilled employees .the main thing is that the older the people get the genuine and authentic experiance there have

but,in some cases the employess are detained for there age for getting work done is very slow and some mistakes are often made by the older peoples but inspite of all this there should be encouraged and give reponsibilities and jobs to them .the causes we get in this type of employees is there need a time to overcome they work and analyze they work before submitting it .

the steos to be taken to cope with this cause is it give occupation and employments to them and not only address there mistakes but,also encourage them infront of there juniours this will make them forget about there age and participate with they interns.

in conclusion,i believe that peoples dont' loose there confidence in themselves and make participation in every type of job and give good dedication and enthusiam towards there skills this can manage and provide better opputunities for them.there teamwork will lead them towards there companies goal and it is a good work to work with the team inmates.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt—causes and solutions—but the development is superficial. While you identify ageism and perceived slowness as causes, and suggest encouragement as a solution, the ideas lack depth and specific examples. The argument is somewhat repetitive and lacks a clear, structured progression. To improve, you should aim to expand on your points with concrete examples, such as how specific industries might benefit from older workers' mentorship, or how government policies could incentivize hiring older staff. The position is clear, but the lack of detailed support limits the score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the internal structure is weak. There is a lack of logical flow between sentences, and the use of cohesive devices is minimal and often inaccurate (e.g., 'the main thing is that', 'the steps to be taken to cope with this cause is it'). Referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the progression of your argument. To improve, focus on using a wider range of linking words (e.g., 'furthermore', 'consequently', 'on the other hand') and ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that directly relates to the prompt.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, with frequent errors in word choice and spelling that occasionally impede communication. For example, 'there' is consistently used instead of 'their', and 'experiance' is misspelled throughout. You rely on basic vocabulary and struggle to use less common items accurately. To improve, focus on mastering basic spelling and expanding your range of topic-specific vocabulary related to employment, such as 'recruitment', 'professional development', 'mentorship', and 'age discrimination'. Using more precise terminology will help convey your ideas more effectively.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains frequent grammatical errors, including issues with subject-verb agreement, punctuation, and sentence structure. Many sentences are run-on or fragmented, such as 'the main thing is that the older the people get the genuine and authentic experiance there have'. There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and the errors are frequent enough to cause some difficulty for the reader. To improve, focus on basic sentence construction, ensuring every sentence has a clear subject and verb, and pay close attention to the difference between 'there', 'their', and 'they're'.

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