Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-08-15

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some countries, it can be very difficult for people over the age of 50 to get good jobs, despite their experience.

What do you think are the causes of this problem, and what measures could be taken to solve it?

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

In my experiance or opinion some countries try to live their country from unemployment but they can't live this ill that's was big problem of country and it was very difficult for people over the age of 50 to get good jobs,despite their experiance they were not found the job because of their oldest and weakness of brain and physically strength. And they were victoms of the taunts and chose to spend their lot of time in leisure time and watch their grandson and all family members its not bad but not good in my opinion countries want to change the rule of them .so that's help their and make the happy and i like that the youth of other countries make the opportunities for them and they were spend and save their time for job and experiance but in pakistan and like this countries where the youth can't found the job in market and chose to go abroad this was help the youth and they were settle in out of country .so we want to make opportunities for the youth because they for help the country to make it famous and help in their progress.so its issues of the unemployment.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, which significantly impacts the development of ideas. While the prompt asks for causes and solutions regarding employment for people over 50, the response is largely off-topic, focusing instead on youth unemployment and emigration in Pakistan. The arguments are underdeveloped, and the position is unclear. The text does not adequately address the specific task requirements, resulting in a low score for task achievement.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay lacks a clear structure. There is no paragraphing, and the flow of ideas is disjointed. The use of cohesive devices is minimal and often misused, such as the repetitive use of 'and' and 'so' to connect unrelated thoughts. The progression of ideas is difficult to follow, as the writer jumps between the topic of older workers and the unrelated topic of youth unemployment without logical transitions. This makes the text difficult to read and understand.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very limited and often inaccurate. There are frequent spelling errors (e.g., 'experiance', 'victoms') and word choice issues (e.g., 'live their country from unemployment', 'oldest and weakness of brain'). The range of vocabulary is insufficient to express complex ideas, and the reliance on basic, repetitive words hinders the communication of the intended message. The student struggles to use appropriate terminology related to the topic of employment or social issues.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical control is weak, with frequent errors that often impede communication. Sentence structures are mostly simple and poorly constructed, with many run-on sentences and incorrect punctuation. There are consistent errors in verb tense, subject-verb agreement, and word order (e.g., 'they were not found the job', 'they for help the country'). The lack of complex structures and the high frequency of basic grammatical errors significantly limit the clarity of the writing.

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