Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-08-20

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some countries, it can be very difficult for people over the age of 50 to get good jobs, despite their experience.

What do you think are the causes of this problem, and what measures could be taken to solve it?

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

It has been seen that people over the age of 50 find it very difficult to get good jobs, even after having very good experience in the field. There can be many reasons for this specific issue involving physical difficulties, mentality issues.

The primary reason what has been believed is physical restrictions due to old age, most of jobs involve being physically present and most work demands physical movements/strength. There is high chance that an old age person can be liability in the working chain rather than being useful. For example, Car manufacturer companies need people with strong physical presence. To address this, we need to follow strict nutrition healthy diets and daily exercise.

Now you can argue this reason is applicable for blue collar jobs but what about white collar? There is other reason behind that. The other reason is the mindset old age people bring to workspace. usually, old age people tend to rely on old methods and old ways of working and they can't keep up with current technologies. For example, an old engineer would want their product to be perfect before launch. Due to this mindset, the product can never even get a launch in some case. They can become Burdon. To address this, they need to learn continuously to keep up with current market.

Overall, to get good jobs after age of 50 they need to be physically in good shape with diet and exercises while also keep up with current technologies and methods and adapt to it.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt: causes and solutions. However, the development is somewhat superficial. The arguments regarding physical limitations and mindset are relevant but lack depth and nuance. For instance, the suggestion that older workers should simply 'follow strict nutrition' to solve ageism in the workplace is a simplistic solution that does not address systemic hiring biases or corporate policy. The essay would benefit from more sophisticated reasoning, such as discussing age-related stereotypes or the need for government legislation. While the position is clear, the ideas are not fully extended, which limits the score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into clear paragraphs, each with a central theme. There is a logical progression from the introduction to the body paragraphs and the conclusion. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and repetitive (e.g., 'The primary reason', 'The other reason'). Some transitions between sentences are abrupt, and the referencing is occasionally unclear, such as the transition into the white-collar argument. While the overall structure is coherent, the lack of sophisticated linking words and varied cohesive devices prevents a higher score.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks precision and variety. There are several instances of awkward phrasing or incorrect word choices, such as 'mentality issues', 'old age person', and 'they can become Burdon' (burden). The range of vocabulary is limited, relying on basic descriptors. To improve, you should aim to use more academic collocations and precise terminology related to employment and professional development. The current level of vocabulary is sufficient to convey meaning but does not demonstrate the flexibility or sophistication required for a higher band.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the flow. Issues include missing articles ('most of jobs'), subject-verb agreement errors ('The primary reason what has been believed'), and awkward sentence construction ('It has been seen that...'). Punctuation is generally functional, but the control over complex structures is inconsistent. While the meaning is usually clear, the frequency of errors in basic grammar prevents the essay from reaching a higher band. Focusing on sentence variety and proofreading for basic errors would be beneficial.

See this exact question answered at other band scores — the same prompt compared across bands.

Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.