Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-08-28

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some countries, it can be very difficult for people over the age of 50 to get good jobs, despite their experience.

What do you think are the causes of this problem, and what measures could be taken to solve it?

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

While, there is ongoing debate about senior citizen to obtain job at their old age despite having a work experience they do not find the workplaces. There are several drawback such as,they have physical issue ,not much aware of new technology but it can overcome easily to support gray hair people, giving job according their expertise.

The primary reason for they do not get placement is some times it might happen dut to their illness because if they have body pain and may be some other issue so firms do not give their job opportunities and they have to stay without any work which became mental illness and lead impact on their health. Furthermore older human do not aware of new technology and they find difficulty to use various kind of digital tools which is also another issue for getting good work placement . For example, my neighbor uncle who have degree certificate however he have back pain so he have to regine from job.

To overcome this issue, firstly younger generation have to support their educated grandparents for stick with their work placement , give motivation for their skills and boost up confident these play major role to support our elder people. Companies have to set criteria for senior citizens such as ,they give task according to their expertise and do not pressure on them give enough time to complete task so they can easily completed they project.

In conclusion, i strongly recommend to all business firm and younger people to always support their grandparents to do their job according to me there is no age limit to doing any work .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses both parts of the prompt—causes and solutions—but the development is limited. The ideas regarding health issues and technological gaps are relevant, but they are presented in a somewhat simplistic manner. The solutions provided, such as younger generations supporting grandparents, are a bit vague and lack depth. The position is clear, but the arguments would benefit from more sophisticated reasoning and concrete examples beyond the brief mention of a neighbor. To reach a higher band, ensure that each point is fully extended with clear logical links and more detailed explanations.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate, such as 'While, there is ongoing debate' and 'in conclusion, i strongly recommend'. Some sentences lack logical flow, making the progression of ideas feel disjointed at times. Referencing is occasionally unclear, particularly in the second paragraph where the transition between health issues and technology feels abrupt. Improving the variety and accuracy of linking words would significantly enhance the flow of the essay.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision and range required for higher bands. There is frequent repetition of basic terms like 'job', 'work', and 'issue'. Some word choices are unnatural or incorrect, such as 'gray hair people', 'regine from job', and 'older human'. While the meaning is generally conveyed, the lack of sophisticated vocabulary and collocation errors limits the score. To improve, focus on learning topic-specific collocations related to employment and aging, and avoid informal phrasing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Common issues include subject-verb agreement ('my neighbor uncle who have'), article usage, and incorrect verb forms ('do not aware', 'they have to regine'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with misplaced commas and capitalization errors. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to cause difficulty for the reader. A focus on basic sentence construction and proofreading for subject-verb agreement would be highly beneficial.

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