Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-08-31

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some countries, it can be very difficult for people over the age of 50 to get good jobs, despite their experience.

What do you think are the causes of this problem, and what measures could be taken to solve it?

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In some parts of the world people above fifty want to have good job but they are jobless notwithstanding with good experiences as well.

This is the main issue is being faced in Asian countries because the regime of the different states encourages modern ideas with youth, ignoring old people and their high experiences in related fields.

There are several factors that contribute to this problem, first of all authority have to desist discrimination between different stages of age groups and their old experiences. On the other hands the main cause of this issue is the rapid advancement of technology.

younger people are very familiar with modern techniques and trends but the elder employees are often familiar with it.

Meanwhile we have to discuss the solutions regards this situation firstly both generations have to create communication chances. Collaborate both ideas to create the new one to pursue more high achievements and exercises

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, which significantly impacts the development of ideas. While the essay identifies causes such as technological advancement and age discrimination, these points are not sufficiently extended or supported with relevant examples. The solutions provided are vague and lack the depth required for an Academic Task 2 response. Because the response is under-length and the ideas are underdeveloped, it does not fully address all parts of the prompt in a comprehensive manner.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay lacks a clear structure. While there is an attempt at paragraphing, the transitions between ideas are abrupt and often confusing. Cohesive devices are used in a mechanical or incorrect way, such as 'On the other hands' and 'Meanwhile we have to discuss'. The logical progression of ideas is hindered by the lack of clear topic sentences and supporting arguments, making the overall flow of the text disjointed.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and often imprecise. There are several instances of awkward phrasing, such as 'regime of the different states' and 'create communication chances'. The student relies on basic vocabulary and struggles to use collocations correctly, for example, 'high experiences' instead of 'extensive experience'. The range is insufficient to express complex ideas clearly, and the errors occasionally impede the reader's understanding of the intended meaning.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that affect clarity. There are issues with subject-verb agreement, such as 'This is the main issue is being faced', and incorrect sentence structures, such as 'Collaborate both ideas to create the new one'. Punctuation is inconsistent, and the use of complex sentence structures is largely unsuccessful. While the meaning is generally discernible, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar limits the score.

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