Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-09-08

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some countries, it can be very difficult for people over the age of 50 to get good jobs, despite their experience.

What do you think are the causes of this problem, and what measures could be taken to solve it?

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In some nations, it is very challenging for individuals to get a job while having a good experience over the age of 50 because they do not have enough strength to take decisions on right time and lack of time . It can be possible for giving a valuable time for reputed company.

First, the primary reason is that they have a lack of time to serving any organisation or company because they have to spend more time with family. Without this, he will have to face serious issues in life and his family will out of his control. Moreover, they have no more power to do anything in this age that's why they can not get good job .for example, a man have a good ability and power to tackle all the situation can get better service in his life.

However, it can be resolve with proper guideline and much more time is required. Hence, proper guideline will be produce more opportunities for younger to run a country and company and the behaviour as well as. The second is, every work and firm take time to make profits for their experience worker . That's why more time is needed to make a good nations in this field.for example, in America senior members are running a state with proper guideline and a suitable time is needed.

As for as I'm concerned that, the old age should take rest and give responsibility to youngsters to resolve this problem otherwise new generation will be deprived of this opportunity. Government should involve and set a scheme for older person to serving a country. These measures can be taken to solve this issue.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt by identifying causes and solutions, but the development is weak and often unclear. The arguments regarding why people over 50 struggle to find work—such as 'lack of time' or 'no more power'—are not logically explained or supported with relevant evidence. The examples provided, such as the mention of America, are vague and do not effectively illustrate the point. The position is somewhat contradictory, as you suggest older people should 'take rest' rather than focusing on how to solve the employment difficulties they face. To improve, ensure each paragraph focuses on a clear, well-reasoned argument that directly answers the prompt.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the logical progression of ideas is frequently interrupted by unclear transitions and confusing sentence structures. While some cohesive devices like 'First' and 'Moreover' are used, they are often followed by ideas that do not logically connect to the previous statement. Referencing is sometimes ambiguous, making it difficult for the reader to follow your train of thought. To improve, focus on using linking words that accurately reflect the relationship between your ideas, and ensure each sentence builds clearly upon the one before it.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive, which restricts your ability to express complex ideas. There are several instances of awkward word choices and incorrect collocations, such as 'take decisions on right time' and 'give a valuable time for reputed company'. These errors occasionally make the meaning difficult to grasp. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use a wider range of vocabulary, including topic-specific collocations related to employment and age-related issues, and ensure that your word choices are precise and appropriate for an academic context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'a man have a good ability'), article usage, and sentence construction. Complex sentence structures are attempted but are often faulty, leading to confusion. For example, the sentence 'Hence, proper guideline will be produce more opportunities...' contains multiple errors in verb tense and structure. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence patterns and ensuring subject-verb agreement, before attempting more complex structures. Proofreading for basic errors in tense and word order would also be highly beneficial.

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