Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-09-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some countries, it can be very difficult for people over the age of 50 to get good jobs, despite their experience.

What do you think are the causes of this problem, and what measures could be taken to solve it?

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In recent time, older people of various countries have to deal with job crisis despite they having considerable experience in their field. This is mainly due to company has to work with the younger people who takes lesser amount of salary than elderly people. Although, it can be solve by policy which can be helpful to elderly people to get their job secure and company recognise their experience.

First, job shortage for elder people is mainly due to higher salary of employee by their experience, therefore company has to pay significant amount of salary to experienced employee.Moreover, company also has to provide heath care and pension after their retirement, as a result it can be more expensive to maintain revenue of company. For instance, Indian government announced strict policy to private company and enterprises, They have to provide complimentary health care and pension according their contribution towards company. Since it cannot possible to maintain these kind of laws and rules , many company fire their older employee.

There effective solutions to solve these kind of problems. Government and company should decide policy together to protect right of older people, it can be helpful both company as well as elderly people. Furthermore, Governments should provide pension scheme in their early stage of career, it can be spreads awareness of saving among people. Foe example, company and government organise seminars of money management and investment schemes like mutual fund and bonds. People might be aware about investment for their future and regardless of getting job, they easily manage their basic expanses.

In conclusion, although elderly people have so many problems to find their employment because of company has revenue issue due to pensions policy and health care management. There are plenty of solutions to help to get job by government policy and investment that can be effective after retirement.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses both parts of the prompt: the causes (salary costs and benefits) and the solutions (policy and financial planning). However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. The explanation regarding why companies fire older employees is clear, but the proposed solutions are slightly disconnected from the problem of hiring. For instance, suggesting pension schemes for early-career workers does not directly address the difficulty of people over 50 finding jobs. The position is clear, but the arguments could be more thoroughly extended with more specific examples or logical links to ensure a more cohesive response to the prompt.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, each with a clear focus. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'First', 'Moreover', and 'In conclusion', which help the reader follow the argument. However, the use of these devices is sometimes mechanical or slightly inaccurate, such as 'There effective solutions' (missing 'are') and 'Foe example' (spelling error). Referencing is generally clear, but the flow between sentences is occasionally interrupted by grammatical errors, which makes the progression feel slightly disjointed at times. Paragraphing is appropriate, but the internal structure of the paragraphs could be improved for better flow.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks the range and precision required for higher bands. There are several instances of awkward phrasing or incorrect word choices, such as 'job crisis' instead of 'employment challenges', and 'maintain revenue of company' instead of 'manage company costs'. Spelling errors like 'heath care' and 'expanses' (for expenses) also occur. While the student attempts to use topic-specific vocabulary like 'pension scheme' and 'investment', the overall control is inconsistent, and the repetition of basic terms limits the score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there is a high frequency of grammatical errors. Frequent issues include subject-verb agreement ('company has to work', 'company fire their older employee'), missing articles ('to private company'), and incorrect verb forms ('it can be solve'). While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are persistent throughout the text. The student attempts complex structures, but these often contain errors, which prevents the essay from reaching a higher band for grammatical accuracy.

See this exact question answered at other band scores — the same prompt compared across bands.

Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.