Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

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IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some countries, it can be very difficult for people over the age of 50 to get good jobs, despite their experience.

What do you think are the causes of this problem, and what measures could be taken to solve it?

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

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AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response addresses the task only minimally and tangentially, which places it at this level. The writer attempts to discuss why people over 50 struggle to find jobs and suggests measures such as pension systems and government funding. However, the position is extremely unclear due to severe expression issues. Ideas are limited, highly repetitive, and under-developed, with the central arguments obscured by a lack of coherent support and straying into unrelated points about family members and general health without clear elaboration linked back to employment.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

Information and ideas are not arranged coherently in this response. While paragraph breaks are attempted, the internal progression of ideas is difficult to follow. There is a lack of clear logical organization, and cohesive devices are either absent, inaccurate, or used in a repetitive and mechanical manner, such as 'In my opinion, thi This is a problom' and 'Further, I measure this pert issue'. Referencing is frequently unclear, making it hard for the reader to understand how sentences and paragraphs connect to one another throughout the text.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is basic and highly repetitive, with frequent word-choice and spelling errors that constantly strain the reader. The student relies on elementary terms and struggles with word formation and collocations, evident in phrases like 'forbody', 'topin', 'persional', 'exmpop explem', and 'extra exe expensive'. There is no evidence of less common lexical items, and frequent spelling mistakes (such as 'problom', 'howerher', 'pert', and 'slove') impede smooth communication and restrict the range to a basic level.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The grammatical range is very limited, consisting primarily of simple and heavily fragmented sentence structures. Errors are frequent and often distort the meaning of the sentences. There is a persistent lack of control over basic grammatical structures, including subject-verb agreement, verb forms and tenses, articles, and prepositions inside grammatical patterns, seen in sentences like 'old older age People can not hard work and long time not Do partic involve that the work'. Punctuation is also erratic, and complex structures are either absent or attempted so faultily that meaning is obscured.

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