Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-10-02

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some countries, it can be very difficult for people over the age of 50 to get good jobs, despite their experience.

What do you think are the causes of this problem, and what measures could be taken to solve it?

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

in recent years, there has been server problem facing by the society such as people who are 50 plus they have face some dificulty to concered the job. They face some negative consequence such as, over age limit and demand high salry. There are description about how people conclud the solution for perticular problem.

Firstly, there has been some people who getting difficult when they try to get new job. First, there are getting from age concern, coperate need young telant for the job partner therefor they try to recurit fresher rather than add someone who alredy near to their retirment and people try to avoid them. For that problem we have solution such as co-operate job recuirement for thier experince. coperate take a stric action about the recuritment and they should consider experince. The goverment encourage that type of compny.

Furthermore, there are some people who are above age, they want some specific amount of the salry base on their experience. That reson behine industrie hire more youngster who fullfiled new skill requirement and charge less and significant amount for their work. For solution above age people need to learn more skill which are trendding during the presant. People need to give compition to the young telent. Industiy need to pay sufficient amount of the cost for their experience and hardwork for try to catch the world.

In conclusion, there are problem such as above the age of 50 people have facing some difficulty due to high salry demand or over age limit. There are some solution such as lern new skill acording to need and goverment need to encourage compny. For that problem both goverment and people take protective step for encorage better futuer.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt partially by identifying some causes of employment difficulties for older workers, such as age limits and salary demands, and suggesting solutions like acquiring new skills and government encouragement. However, the position is not always clearly stated, and the ideas remain limited and under-developed. For instance, the discussion on corporate recruitment practices is repetitive and lacks specific examples or well-reasoned support. To move to a higher level, the writer needs to extend their ideas more fully with clear explanations and concrete examples that directly address both parts of the prompt in greater depth.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

There is some organisation evident in the division of paragraphs into an introduction, causes, solutions, and a conclusion. However, the response lacks clear overall progression, and the logical links between sentences can be difficult to follow. Cohesive devices are often inadequate, inaccurate, or repetitive, such as the frequent use of 'there has been' and 'there are some people who'. Referencing is also occasionally unclear, as seen in phrases like 'For that problem we have solution'. To improve, the writer should ensure a smoother flow of ideas by using a wider variety of cohesive devices more accurately and establishing a clearer logical progression from one paragraph to the next.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is limited and minimally adequate for the task. There are noticeable errors in word choice, word form, and spelling that occasionally cause difficulty for the reader, such as 'server' instead of severe, 'dificulty' instead of difficulty, 'concered' instead of concerned, and 'salry' instead of salary. The writer attempts to use some less common vocabulary like 'coperate' and 'recuritment', but these contain persistent spelling errors and inaccurate collocations. To achieve a higher score, the writer needs to expand their lexical range, pay closer attention to spelling and word forms, and use vocabulary with greater precision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The text displays a very limited range of sentence structures. While there are some attempts at complex sentences, they are frequently faulty, leading to frequent errors that can cause difficulty for the reader. Examples include 'there has been server problem facing by the society' and 'First, there are getting from age concern'. There are also frequent errors in verb forms, tenses, subject-verb agreement, and articles throughout the response. To progress, the writer must work on building a better mix of simple and complex sentence forms with greater grammatical accuracy, ensuring that basic sentence architecture is sound and free from frequent intrusive errors.

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