Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-10-06

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some countries, it can be very difficult for people over the age of 50 to get good jobs, despite their experience.

What do you think are the causes of this problem, and what measures could be taken to solve it?

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Nowadays, employment is very important for any individual to live a well-suitable lifestyle thus, people are seeking job opportunities to survive in this world. But in some nations, it is very difficult for older people specially above the age of 50 to find a better job. Thus, this essay will state the causes of this problem and also will discuss some solution to prevent this problems.

Primarily, as people want creative and young minds because they can work more flexibily as well as can serve long-time service, older people often lacks to find job for themselves though having experince. Furthermore, there is less awareness among the elder people about the job opportunities because they arent active more on social platforms. Also, in this competetive world there are not much jobs that have vacancy and the often creates a problem for people to find jobs.

In addition, to solve this problems there are some solutions that could helps older people to get jobs or employment. Equal opportunities should be provided among all the job-seeking candidate so that adult too have chance for getting job. Businesses should promote thier jobs and works through different channels like Radio, newspaper so that awareness increases among the people. Also government should fund companies to posses new jobs for adults specially so that they can have more opportunities.

To conclude, finding jobs in adulthood in some countries is difficult because of the availability of the number of jobs and young minds are considered more suitable and in order to solve that government should influnce businesses to provide new jobs and work opportunities for older people and treat them as equal as the younger generation.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

The response addresses all parts of the prompt by discussing both the causes of employment difficulties for people over 50 and proposing measures to solve them. However, the development of ideas remains limited and under-developed, placing the response at this level. For instance, the causes mentioned, such as companies preferring younger minds or older people lacking social platform awareness, are introduced but not fully explained with concrete examples or extended reasoning. Similarly, the proposed solutions, such as government funding and using traditional channels like the radio, are stated broadly without detailing how they would practically be implemented by businesses. The position is generally clear throughout, but the lack of fully elaborated arguments prevents the essay from achieving a higher score.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The essay displays a coherent overall arrangement with a clear attempt to structure the response into an introduction, body paragraphs addressing causes and solutions, and a conclusion. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate ideas. However, cohesion is sometimes mechanical and referencing is not always clear, which aligns with this band. For example, transitional phrases such as 'Primarily', 'In addition', and 'To conclude' are used to signal the structure, but internal cohesion within paragraphs can be repetitive, such as the frequent repetition of the phrase 'to find jobs'. While there is a logical progression from causes to solutions, the mechanical nature of the cohesive devices and occasional unclear referencing mean the response sits comfortably at this level rather than progressing further.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary used provides a minimally adequate range for the task, but noticeable errors in word choice, word form, and spelling cause some difficulty for the reader. The writer attempts some less common vocabulary, such as 'competetive' (competitive) and 'flexibily' (flexibly), but these attempts are often marred by spelling mistakes and awkward collocations like 'long-time service' instead of 'long service'. Additionally, words are misused in phrases such as 'posses new jobs' instead of 'create new jobs' or 'provide new positions'. These lexical slips and limited control over less common terms restrict the score for this criterion, as the vocabulary lacks the precision and flexibility required for higher bands.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The writer uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but attempts at complex structures are frequently faulty, leading to frequent errors that cause some difficulty for the reader. There are noticeable issues with subject-verb agreement, articles, and plurals, such as 'older people often lacks to find job', 'adult too have chance', and 'this problems'. Preposition and grammatical pattern errors are also present, as seen in 'awareness among the elder people about the job opportunities'. While the underlying meaning is usually discernible, the high frequency of grammatical inaccuracies across different structures prevents the response from achieving a higher band descriptor.

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