Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-10-24

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some countries, it can be very difficult for people over the age of 50 to get good jobs, despite their experience.

What do you think are the causes of this problem, and what measures could be taken to solve it?

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In major nations, handicape locals are unabe to find their jobs even with several years of experiences. I think that government should implement such ideas that are suitable for old age locals, they can build apartments and create such schemes that are only for old people.

On one hand , aged people are making great role in our society, they are unable to neglected from our environment. Because we peole learn much more things from our seniors, and if we are creating such modern things like robots, advance electronic devices especially AI (Artificial intelligence) are only able because of our elders so their duties are unable to neglet.

Moreover, they are much matured and have a alot of experineces they have, if we people implement them in our business for short discussion or like the job that is only suitable for aged one ,so it will not only beneficial for us but also for our nations ,these are the leaders of our country and the roots of country making buildings of the nations.

Lastly , government should implement ideas that are only suitable for our aged locals like build different and unique apartments,shops and other such institutions and these different departments will introduce those vacancies that are suitable for every one like if the person is expert in designing, so he will lead the designing institutions and if the person is expert in making tools, so he will lead the tools departement. It will not only make the nation economical stable but will also build such unique and expert creaters in that particular society.

In conclusion, we can say that aged people are making crucial part in our society ,they are unable to neglet. They are creative in such modern things that we are unaware of them as well as they have alot of experiences in some unique sites that is why Government should implement such ideas that are onle suitable for them.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You give a general view that older people should remain involved in society and suggest creating jobs or institutions suited to their skills. However, the task asks for both causes of the difficulty in finding good jobs and measures to address it. The response focuses almost entirely on older people’s value and proposed schemes; it does not explain why employers may reject applicants over 50, such as age discrimination, assumptions about adaptability, or limited training opportunities. The proposed apartments and shops are also not clearly connected to securing good employment, and the examples about design and tools need fuller explanation. To strengthen the response, state a clear position, explain several causes, and develop practical measures that directly address them.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has an introduction, several body paragraphs, and a conclusion, and signposts such as “Moreover,” “Lastly,” and “In conclusion” show an attempt to organise the discussion. However, the progression is difficult to follow because the paragraphs repeat the idea that older people are valuable without clearly separating causes from solutions. Some links between ideas are unclear: the discussion of robots and AI does not explain how it supports the argument about employment, while the move from building apartments to creating specialist departments is abrupt. Referencing is also sometimes confusing, as in “these different departments” after several possible institutions have been mentioned. Organise the essay around distinct causes and measures, and use linking phrases to show the relationship between each claim and its example.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt topic-related vocabulary, including “matured,” “experiences,” “vacancies,” “designing,” and “economical stable,” and you try to express ideas about older workers’ skills and contribution. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make meaning unclear, such as “making great role,” “neglected from our environment,” and “expert creaters.” Spelling errors, including “handicape,” “experineces,” and “departement,” also reduce accuracy. Some phrases are repeated, particularly “aged people” and “suitable for,” so the vocabulary does not yet show much flexibility. Build a bank of accurate employment-related expressions and check spelling and collocations; for example, use “play an important role” and “experienced workers.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including conditional examples such as “if the person is expert in designing, so he will lead…” This shows an effort to connect ideas, but complex sentences are often faulty, and frequent errors can make the reader work to understand the meaning. For example, “they are unable to neglected” has an incorrect verb form, while “if we people implement them in our business… so it will not only beneficial” has problems with clause structure and the verb after “will.” Subject–verb agreement and articles are also inconsistent, as in “aged people are making crucial part.” Practise building accurate sentences with “can/could,” “because,” and “if,” and check each sentence for a complete verb, correct agreement, and appropriate articles.

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