Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar charts and line graph below show the results of a survey conducted over a three-year period to discover what people who live in London think of the city.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

What are the best things about living in London?

Student answer (Band 4.5)

introduction,

the bar chart illustrate that the result of a survey. conducted over a three year period to discover. london resident prospective.

OVERALL, shoping facility is very bright in this time and also in future. but some problem is noise and polution because of the construction or cars. that poluted the envoriment. the well thing is there are a huge amount of job opportunitiesfor london people in year 1 to year3. but the transport ratio is not well in 1 to 3 years its decrease 25% to 23%in these3years.

BODY PARAGRAPH 1;

the best things to living in london. is there are a huge amount of shopes of all things that are required for people. in 1 to 3 years. and the second one is job opportunity thats a greats for london people to easily achevie their suitablejobs about their experence.next one is the mixture of people. people come from all over the world to living in the london. its ratio is equal in first 2 years but its decrease in last year. the meuseum and art gallery is such a favourite of people it is historical place for people to see history

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify several relevant positive features, including shops, job opportunities, the mix of people, and museums and galleries, and you attempt to describe changes over the three years. However, the report addresses the charts only partially: it omits the worst-things chart and the line graph on litter, air quality and noise, which contain major findings. Some details are inaccurate or unclear: transport is described as falling from 25% to 23%, whereas the best-things figures are about 22%, 20% and 21.5%; the claim that shopping is “very bright” is not a clear summary of its modest fluctuations. Include an overview of the main patterns across all three visuals and support it with accurate comparisons.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is an attempt to organise the response with an introduction, an overview and a body paragraph, and the discussion of positive features has a basic sequence. However, the progression is difficult to follow because the overview combines unrelated points and does not clearly summarise the charts. The response ends after discussing museums, without a concluding or further paragraph covering the other visuals. Linking is limited and sometimes awkward: repeated “and” and “next one” do not clearly show how points relate, while the semicolon after “BODY PARAGRAPH 1” does not create meaningful structure. Use clear paragraphs for the overview and each chart, and group comparisons logically by year or feature.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, such as “job opportunities,” “mixture of people,” and “museums and art galleries,” so the reader can identify several intended topics. However, the range is limited and many expressions are inaccurate or informal, sometimes making meaning unclear. For example, “shoping facility is very bright” does not naturally describe survey results, and “the well thing” is an imprecise way to introduce an advantage. Spelling errors such as “achevie,” “experence,” and “meuseum” are noticeable, while “poluted the envoriment” is both misspelled and not clearly tied to the chart data. Use precise chart-reporting language, such as “accounted for” or “was regarded as,” and check spelling.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts some longer sentences and uses basic present-tense forms, but grammatical control is inconsistent, and errors often make relationships between ideas difficult to understand. Examples include “the bar chart illustrate,” where the subject and verb do not agree, and “the best things to living in london,” where the verb pattern is incorrect. Sentence boundaries and punctuation are also unreliable: the opening is fragmented, and several sentences run together, as in “its ratio is equal in first 2 years but its decrease in last year.” Articles, plurals and prepositions are frequently missing or misused. Practise writing complete sentences with one clear main clause, then add accurate comparisons using forms such as “remained stable” and “fell slightly.”

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