Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

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IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar charts and line graph below show the results of a survey conducted over a three-year period to discover what people who live in London think of the city.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

What are the best things about living in London?

Student answer (Band 4.0)

the best thing for living in london is range of shop , job opportunties,mixture of people ,museum and art galleries,night life and transports in london these things give us opportunties and here are so many benefits we got the amazing benefits.in london transport fare is low the students got benefits for 1 year we got best benefit nearly 50 percent .in london art galleries and museum entery is low it help the students and people to gained knowlege in low free .in london there are different types of people live most of people behave is well which increase the newer confident and help to live safe life.in london have so much employment which give the also students part time job by this students meet expense .there people can shop easily in low budget which decrease the anually expense .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

The response identifies several relevant positive features, including shops, employment, cultural attractions and the mix of people, but it does not provide a report describing the charts as a whole. It focuses almost entirely on personal explanations of benefits and omits the worst-things chart and the line graph about whether litter, air quality and noise are major problems. The claim that transport fares are low and museum entry is inexpensive is not shown by the data. There is also no clear overview of the main patterns, and the few figures mentioned are vague or unsupported. The response is 11 words below the required minimum. To improve, summarise all three visuals, select key comparisons and report accurate approximate percentages rather than adding explanations not supported by the charts.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic sequence of related points about London’s attractions and opportunities, so the reader can identify the general subject. However, the response is presented as one long paragraph, with no clear introduction, overview or separation of chart information. Ideas are joined mainly by repeated phrases such as “in London” and “which,” and the opening list does not lead into a structured comparison of the data. Some links between claims are difficult to follow, for example the movement from transport fares to student benefits and then to museum entry. Organise the report into paragraphs, use a clear progression from overview to selected details, and use linking expressions to show comparisons across years and categories.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “job opportunities,” “mixture of people,” “art galleries,” “employment” and “part time job.” These choices make the general subject understandable. However, the range is limited and several phrases are repetitive or imprecise, such as “amazing benefits” and “best benefit,” which do not describe chart data clearly. There are also spelling and word-form errors, including “opportunties,” “entery” and “knowlege,” as well as awkward collocations such as “shop easily in low budget.” Aim for precise language for reporting figures and trends, such as “accounted for,” “rose slightly” and “was the most frequently cited advantage,” and check spelling and natural word combinations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts to connect ideas in longer sentences, for example “there are different types of people live most of people behave is well,” but sentence structures are often incomplete or incorrectly joined, making relationships between ideas unclear. There are recurring problems with articles, plurals, agreement and verb forms, as in “the best thing,” “people live,” and “which give the also students part time job.” Punctuation is also limited: the response begins with a lowercase letter and uses few full stops to separate its ideas. Most sentences rely on simple patterns, with little accurate variety. Practise writing short, complete sentences first, then combine them using controlled clauses—for example, “The range of shops was the most popular feature in Year 1.”

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