Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar charts and line graph below show the results of a survey conducted over a three-year period to discover what people who live in London think of the city.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

What are the best things about living in London?

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar chat shows the best thing about living in london. As there are many thing to tell about like

Range of shop, job opportunities , mixture of people,musem and gallary I night life and transport .

On the one hand, if we talk in percentage then range of shop have above 45% in 1 year . While in 2 year it is below 45%.However, if we talk about job opportunities than in one year it is increase to 39%. Meanwhile, in 2ndand 3rd year it is decreasing it percentage ,also in the mixture of people their is same percentage in 1st and 2nd year like it is 35%. Although in the 3rd year it is decrease little bit.

On the other hand, the percentage of the mesum and art gallary is increasing like in 1st year it it is below 30 % and in 2nd year it reaches to 30% and in 3rd year it is above 30%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response identifies several relevant categories and attempts to report changes, including the decline in the share naming job opportunities and the rise in mentions of museums and galleries. However, it covers only a small part of the visual information: night life and transport are listed but not described, and the entire chart about worst aspects and the line graph on major problems are omitted. There is also no clear overview of the main patterns. Some figures are inaccurate or unclear: the range of shops is about 45% in Year 1, not above it, and the mixture of people is roughly unchanged between Years 1 and 2 before falling slightly. The report therefore addresses the task only partially, with limited and under-developed detail. Include an overview and select key comparisons from all three visuals.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to group information, with an opening followed by paragraphs introduced by “On the one hand” and “On the other hand.” These markers show an effort to connect ideas, but the organisation does not provide a clear progression through the charts: the first paragraph moves between several categories, while the second covers only museums and galleries. The opening is also an incomplete, list-like sentence, and the final paragraph stops without a concluding overview. Some linking is mechanical or confusing, particularly “Meanwhile” and “Although” where the relationships between figures are not fully clear. Organise the report into an introduction, a concise overview, and body paragraphs grouped by chart or trend; use linking words only when their logical relationship is clear.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses a basic range of task-related vocabulary, including “percentage,” “job opportunities,” “mixture of people,” and “increasing.” This is enough to communicate the general subject, but repetition and inaccurate forms limit precision. Examples include “range of shop,” “mesum,” and “gallary,” while “bar chat” appears to be an incorrect term for the visual. Phrases such as “it is decrease little bit” also do not express the intended trend naturally. Build a more accurate set of chart-reporting expressions, such as “the proportion of respondents,” “rose slightly,” and “remained stable,” and check spelling and collocations. More precise vocabulary would help distinguish categories and describe changes clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The writer attempts both simple and longer sentences, using clauses introduced by “while,” “although,” and “if.” However, complex constructions are often faulty, and errors in agreement, tense, articles, and sentence formation are frequent enough to make some statements difficult to follow. For example, “range of shop have above 45%” has an incorrect verb form and an unclear comparison, while “in 2ndand 3rd year it is decreasing it percentage” contains several structural problems. “There is same percentage” also needs an article and a more suitable verb construction. Focus first on accurate simple sentences, then practise controlled comparisons: “The figure was about 45% in Year 1, then fell in Year 2.” Check subject–verb agreement, articles, and punctuation when joining clauses.

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