Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

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IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar charts and line graph below show the results of a survey conducted over a three-year period to discover what people who live in London think of the city.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

What are the best things about living in London?

Student answer (Band 4.0)

the bar visual graph shows that results of a survey conducted over a three year .

well london is very beautifull place and some reasons good habits and non habits .in 3 years london situations which people think about the best thing ever in london city is range of shops to the first year is very good which include job oppurtunities in many other involve. london next few 3 year which people like most the thing is range of shops is 45 percent increase in the other side of lot of oppurtunities in london city .london the thing most is mixture of people like another country involve like usa pakistan negeria india and so mixture at countries people involve . Moreover,it have alots of museum spot in every selective street and art galleries and some historic thing are there in museum and art galleries which people see there with people friends etc. in london night life is very advanced and night is full of enjoyments with family friends gathering at a peacefull environment is london .personally i like the night of london life and mostly like night life is everone favorite .In the other things of london people like the most transfort system for my perspective when a person wake up in the morning he will go to the buisnees area transfort system in every place are availble , it is the most best things about the things which every london gens 'gens family ,friends are like .London is the most active beautiful place ever in london . so it is the best thing which in future 3 years are very development to london city alot of oppurtunities are availble in there lond

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify several relevant positive features, including shops, job opportunities, the mix of people, museums, nightlife and transport, and you correctly give 45% for shops in Year 1. However, the report responds only minimally to the task because it describes the positive chart while omitting the chart on the worst aspects and the line graph about whether litter, air quality and noise are major problems. There is also no clear, data-based overview of the main patterns. Some claims, such as London being “very beautiful” or future development, are personal or unsupported rather than information shown in the charts. To improve, summarise the main comparisons across all three visuals and support them with accurate figures and trends.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

The response contains a loose sequence of points about different positive features, and connectors such as “Moreover” and “In the other things” show an attempt to link ideas. However, the information is not arranged into a clear report structure: there is no distinct overview, and the discussion moves from shops to people, museums, nightlife and transport without clear grouping or progression. Several sentences run together, making relationships between ideas difficult to follow; for example, the passage beginning “london next few 3 year” combines shops and job opportunities unclearly. Repeated references to London and “the most” also make the flow repetitive. Use separate paragraphs for an overview and key details, and organise comparisons by chart or theme.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some task-related vocabulary, including “range of shops,” “job opportunities,” “mixture of people,” “museums and art galleries,” and “transport system.” This gives the reader a basic sense of the topics being discussed. However, vocabulary is repetitive and often imprecise, and frequent spelling errors make the report harder to understand: examples include “beautifull,” “oppurtunities,” “transfort,” and “availble.” Some phrases are not natural in this context, such as “good habits and non habits,” “night is full of enjoyments,” and “the most best things.” Aim for accurate chart-report language, such as “percentage,” “feature,” “increased slightly,” and “was the most popular,” and check spelling and collocations carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

There are attempts to form longer sentences and connect clauses, but control is weak and errors frequently obscure the intended meaning. For instance, “the bar visual graph shows that results of a survey conducted over a three year” lacks a complete, well-formed opening, while “in 3 years london situations which people think about the best thing ever” has unclear clause structure. Articles, verb forms, agreement and sentence boundaries are often missing or inaccurate, as in “it have alots of museum spot” and “transfort system in every place are availble.” Capitalisation and punctuation are also inconsistent. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with controlled clauses using “while,” “whereas” and “which.”

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