Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-07-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar charts and line graph below show the results of a survey conducted over a three-year period to discover what people who live in London think of the city.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

What are the best things about living in London?

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The mentioned bar charts and line graphs illustrate the perspectives of residents who are living in London from year one to year 3. This report discuss about the aspects of interests of london people. There are five main things

As it is shown the graph "Range of shops" is the highest in the year one when compared with the the rest of the things. Secondly, resident are in favor of job opportunites in the year 1 which is the amount of 35. They tend to make an interest of mixture of people which is having a moderate level of 35% in both year 1 and year 2. Speaking of museums & art galleries, there is an incline in year 3 in contrast to year 1 and year 2 which is a significant event

for night life its less likely having an interest because the percentage 25% is in third tear

For transport its the least one

Its obvious that london residents are more into range shops and less likely to transport.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response attempts to describe the provided data but fails to provide a clear overview or a logical summary of the trends. While it mentions several categories, the data interpretation is often inaccurate or confusing, such as claiming 'Range of shops' is the highest in year one without clear reference to the specific values. The report lacks a cohesive structure to present the data effectively, and the description of the trends is fragmented. To improve, you should provide a clear introductory overview of the main trends and ensure that data points are accurately cited and compared across the three years.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is divided into very short, disjointed paragraphs that lack logical progression. The use of cohesive devices is minimal and often mechanical, such as 'Secondly' or 'Speaking of'. There is a lack of clear transition between the different categories of data, making the report feel like a list of observations rather than a cohesive analysis. To reach a higher band, you should use more sophisticated linking words and ensure that each paragraph has a clear focus, moving logically from one point to the next to guide the reader through the data.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. Phrases like 'things', 'amount of', and 'less likely' are used repeatedly, which restricts the ability to describe the data with precision. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'aspects of interests of london people' and 'make an interest of mixture of people'. To improve, you should incorporate more precise academic vocabulary related to data description, such as 'proportion', 'fluctuation', 'significant increase', or 'remained stable', and avoid informal phrasing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are issues with subject-verb agreement ('This report discuss'), article usage ('the the rest'), and sentence structure ('for night life its less likely having an interest'). The range of grammatical structures is limited, relying mostly on simple sentences. To improve, you should focus on mastering basic sentence construction, including correct verb tenses and punctuation, and attempt to incorporate a wider variety of complex structures to describe the relationships between the data points more accurately.

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