Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-08-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar charts and line graph below show the results of a survey conducted over a three-year period to discover what people who live in London think of the city.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

What are the best things about living in London?

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The line graph show that the people live in the London in the think city.The time period of the living people is three year , and show that the result. And describe the big problem of the people in London.

First of all, the best thing of the living about the London is in the 1 year the living persantage is 45 of the shops and the 2 year the shops is down and the next year the shops is high to the 43 persantege. the first year the job opportunities is 38 and the second year the opportunities of job is less and 3rd year the opportunities is same. And the mixture of the people is same to the next two year 37 and the next year is low to 36.The museums first year is low33 and the next the years is high to the 34to36. and the night low and next year is high.

major problem is 85 littel and the air problem is 63 and noise problem is 58.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to adequately address the task. While it attempts to describe the data, the information provided is fragmented and often inaccurate. The report lacks a clear overview of the trends, and the data points mentioned are difficult to follow due to poor phrasing. The response does not clearly distinguish between the line graph and the bar charts, and the description of the 'major problems' is extremely brief and lacks context. To improve, you must provide a clear summary of the main trends and ensure that all data points are accurately and logically presented in relation to the categories provided in the prompt.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay lacks logical progression. While there is an attempt at paragraphing, the sentences within the paragraphs are disjointed and lack cohesive devices to link ideas together. The use of referencing is unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow which data point corresponds to which category. The transition between the description of the 'best things' and the 'major problems' is abrupt and lacks a clear structure. To improve, focus on using transition words (e.g., 'however', 'in contrast', 'furthermore') and ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that guides the reader through the data.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive, relying heavily on basic words like 'thing', 'high', and 'low'. There are significant issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'living persantage' instead of 'percentage' and 'mixture of the people' instead of 'cultural diversity'. The spelling errors, such as 'persantege' and 'littel', further hinder communication. To achieve a higher score, you need to expand your range of vocabulary to include more precise terms for describing data, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', 'declined', or 'significant proportion'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'The line graph show'), article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or run-on, making the text difficult to parse. There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and the basic sentences used are often grammatically incorrect. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically subject-verb agreement and the correct use of prepositions and articles. Proofreading for basic punctuation and capitalization is also essential.

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