Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-08-17
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar charts and line graph below show the results of a survey conducted over a three-year period to discover what people who live in London think of the city.
Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
What are the best things about living in London?
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line graph shows that the results of a survey held ove a three-year period to discovor what people who live in London think about the city In London there is a more jobs avaidible for the people who builds career as well as higher percentage of range of shops in London. But on the other hand there are a disadvantages to live in London like cost of living which is about 50% to 55% of the people. However, in London there is a big issue of crime which has higher percentage there.
Overall, in London people came from different countries. The good thing about London is about museums and art galleries which is about to 28% to 35% in a three years However, the graph illustrates that over the three years after researching on it, the advantages of living in London are more job opportunities and range of shops has high proportion as well as disadvantage of living in London are crime and cost of living there and traffic congestion has higher percentage rather than advantages of living in Londe
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to adequately report the data provided in the charts. While it mentions some categories like job opportunities, cost of living, and crime, it lacks a clear, systematic overview of the trends or specific comparisons between the years. The data is presented in a fragmented way, and the percentages cited are often vague or inaccurate based on the visual evidence. The report does not effectively highlight the key features or differences between the categories, which is essential for an Academic Task 1 response. To improve, you must focus on grouping data logically and describing the trends precisely rather than listing isolated points.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into two paragraphs, but the internal structure is weak. The progression of ideas is disjointed, and the use of cohesive devices is limited and often repetitive (e.g., 'However' is used frequently but not always appropriately). The transition between the introduction and the body is abrupt, and the concluding summary is somewhat confusing as it repeats information already mentioned without adding clarity. To improve, ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence and use a wider variety of linking words to connect your points logically, such as 'in contrast', 'furthermore', or 'consequently'.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. There are several spelling errors, such as 'ove' instead of 'over', 'discovor' instead of 'discover', and 'avaidible' instead of 'available'. The phrasing is often unnatural, such as 'people who builds career' or 'there is a big issue of crime'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to describe the data with precision, relying on basic descriptors rather than academic terminology suitable for a report. You should focus on learning collocations related to data description, such as 'a significant proportion', 'a steady increase', or 'a notable decline'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'people who builds'), article usage (e.g., 'a disadvantages'), and sentence structure (e.g., 'the advantages of living in London are more job opportunities and range of shops has high proportion'). The range of sentence structures is limited, and the punctuation is inconsistent. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring that subjects and verbs agree, and practicing the correct use of articles and prepositions in an academic context.
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