Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-08-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar charts and line graph below show the results of a survey conducted over a three-year period to discover what people who live in London think of the city.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

What are the best things about living in London?

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The both chart gives information the results of a survey conducted over a three year time to discover what individuals who stay i London of the city.

To begin with, the bar graph shows the result the survey the best products about in London range of more increase 45% in the first year. The worst things about living in London of living 55% in the 1 year. The line chart shows in the first year 70 percent. Secondly, In the museums art galleries slightly peak 35% in the 2 year. The cost of housing has decreased 35% in the same 1 and 2 year.

On the other hand, the line graph show air quality dropped 60% are these things a major problems in London. Moreover, in the transport same percentage over a three year near 25% the best things about living in London. In the 1 year 35% transport the worst products about living in London. the line chart show noise 58% in the first year.

Overall, in the first year more increase ratio almost in both bar graphs. the line graph noise decreased in the from 1 year to 3 year.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to clearly present the data from the charts. While you mention some categories like 'museums' and 'air quality', the descriptions are often confusing or inaccurate, such as stating 'the best products about in London range of more increase 45%'. The report lacks a clear overview of the main trends, and the data points provided are difficult to follow or interpret. To improve, you must focus on identifying the most significant trends (e.g., what increased or decreased the most) rather than listing isolated, unclear percentages. The response does not adequately convey the information provided in the visual prompts.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5

The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the logical progression of ideas is weak. The use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or misused, such as 'To begin with' and 'On the other hand', which do not logically connect the disparate points being made. Referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow which chart or data point is being discussed. The lack of clear topic sentences and the disjointed nature of the sentences hinder the overall flow of the report.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very limited and often inappropriate for an academic report. You frequently use incorrect terminology, such as 'products' instead of 'factors' or 'aspects', and 'stay' instead of 'reside' or 'live'. There is a lack of precision in describing trends; for example, 'slightly peak' is a contradictory phrase. The repetition of basic words and the misuse of technical terms significantly limit your ability to convey information clearly. You need to expand your range of vocabulary related to data description, such as 'fluctuate', 'decline', 'significant', and 'proportion'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are significant issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'the line graph show'), sentence structure (e.g., 'the best things about living in London of living 55%'), and missing articles or prepositions. The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple, error-prone sentences. There is little evidence of complex sentence construction, and the errors in basic grammar make the text difficult to read and understand. Focus on mastering basic sentence construction before attempting more complex structures.

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