Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-09-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar charts and line graph below show the results of a survey conducted over a three-year period to discover what people who live in London think of the city.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

What are the best things about living in London?

What are the best things about living in London?

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The bar chart illustrates the report of a survey over a three year period to describe who live in london think of the city.

There are three year complete report which is showing different things in london.There are 2 graphs in 1st one there is high percentage of shops which is 45 percent and the opportunity which is very low is tranport and there is a great difference in these two facilities.

Furthermore, night life is about 25 percent.

AI examiner evaluation

CriterionBand
Task Achievement / Task Response4.0
Coherence and Cohesion5.0
Lexical Resource5.0
Grammatical Range and Accuracy5.0
Overall5.0

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, reaching only 79 words. Consequently, the task is only partially addressed. The content is severely underdeveloped; while you mention shops and transport, you fail to describe the trends over the three-year period or provide a comprehensive overview of the data presented in the charts. To improve, you must ensure you cover all parts of the prompt, including an overview of the main trends and specific data points for all categories, while meeting the length requirement to allow for full development of your ideas.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response lacks a clear logical progression. While there is a basic attempt to structure the report with a few sentences, the lack of paragraphing and the absence of cohesive devices make the text feel disjointed. The transition 'Furthermore' is used, but the overall flow is hindered by the brevity and the lack of clear connections between the data points. To improve, you should group related information into distinct paragraphs and use a wider range of linking words (e.g., 'in contrast', 'meanwhile', 'subsequently') to guide the reader through your analysis.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. You rely on basic terms like 'things', 'high percentage', and 'very low'. There is little evidence of the range required to describe data effectively. For instance, instead of saying 'high percentage', you could use 'a significant proportion' or 'a dominant factor'. To reach a higher band, you need to incorporate more precise vocabulary related to describing trends and statistics, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', or 'experienced a sharp decline', and avoid repeating simple structures.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains several grammatical errors that affect clarity. Examples include 'illustrates the report of a survey' (should be 'illustrates the results of a survey') and 'describe who live in london think' (should be 'describe what London residents think'). There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and punctuation is inconsistent, particularly with missing spaces after periods. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of relative clauses. Aim to vary your sentence structure by combining simple ideas into more complex, accurate sentences.

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