Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-09-05
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar charts and line graph below show the results of a survey conducted over a three-year period to discover what people who live in London think of the city.
Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
What are the best things about living in London?
Student answer (Band 4.0)
Living in london there are many best things, first we speak about range of there are many affordable price restaurants and get part time in restaurant you can easily earn small amounts of money.In London ,there are many job opportunities and you can easily get job in London.London is the best city for looking for high paying jobs.In London there are many places to visit the best things in London to visit historical places like begingham palace
In London the cost of living is so expensive ,the restaurant so expensive,the branded clothes are so expensive ,the grocery items are so expensive the worst thing about London everthing so expensive .There are many pickpockets in London be aware if you visit London . The houses are so expensive in London and if you are international students you may some difficulties to find reasonable price rented houses.There is so traffic in London and and so noise in London
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 3.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 3.0
The response fails to address the task requirements. The prompt asks for a report describing the information presented in the bar charts and line graph. Instead, the student provides a subjective, anecdotal commentary about living in London, completely ignoring the data provided. There is no mention of the survey results, trends, or specific categories shown in the charts. Consequently, the response is off-topic and does not fulfill the requirements of an Academic Task 1 report, which necessitates an objective summary of visual data.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The response lacks logical organization. While there is a division into two paragraphs, the ideas within them are presented as a list of disjointed sentences rather than a coherent report. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link ideas, and the progression of information is absent. The writing feels like a collection of random thoughts rather than a structured analysis of data. The lack of an introduction or a clear overview further hinders the flow of the text.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. The student relies heavily on basic adjectives like 'expensive' and 'best', which are used repeatedly throughout the text. There is no attempt to use academic or topic-specific vocabulary related to describing data, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', or 'proportion'. Spelling errors, such as 'begingham' for Buckingham, also detract from the quality of the writing. The range is insufficient to convey complex information effectively.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammar is characterized by frequent errors that often impede clarity. There are significant issues with sentence structure, such as run-on sentences and comma splices (e.g., 'In London, there are many job opportunities and you can easily get job in London'). Subject-verb agreement and article usage are inconsistent. The response lacks complex sentence structures, relying almost exclusively on simple, repetitive patterns. Punctuation is also used incorrectly throughout the text, making it difficult to follow the intended meaning.
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