Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-09-07
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar charts and line graph below show the results of a survey conducted over a three-year period to discover what people who live in London think of the city.
Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
What are the best things about living in London?
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The graph below illustrates the information about the best things to do for living in London and there are three different years shown for each of them. There are six things discussed which are range of shops, job opportunities, mixture of people, museum and art galleries, night life and transport.
Overall, the highest record shown among these are the range of shops in the London which is about 45% in the first year. and remained above the forty percent in all the three years. If we take a look to the job opportunities they are at the 38% in the first year
and had decreased to 35% in the second and third year. the museum and art galleries record of percentage has been started from almost 30 percent like 29% and reached to 35% hardly in the third year as passing from 32% in the second year.
While the mixture of people record was strictly at 35% percent in first and the second year and then dropped to 33% on the third year.
If we take a look to the night life in the London so it started from 21% and has been increased to 23%
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the data, but the analysis is incomplete. You failed to include data for the final category (transport) and did not provide a concluding summary of the trends. While you identified the highest category (range of shops) and noted some fluctuations, the description of the data is somewhat mechanical. To improve, ensure you cover all categories presented in the visual and provide a clear overview that highlights the most significant trends or differences across the three-year period. The report lacks a cohesive summary of the overall findings, which is essential for a high band score.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is organized into paragraphs, but the flow between sentences is often disjointed. You rely on simple transitions like 'If we take a look to', which feels repetitive and unnatural. There is a lack of sophisticated cohesive devices to link ideas effectively. For instance, the transition between the description of job opportunities and museums is abrupt. To improve, use a wider variety of linking words and phrases (e.g., 'In contrast', 'Furthermore', 'Conversely') to guide the reader through the data more smoothly. Additionally, ensure that each paragraph has a clear focus to improve the overall logical progression.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks variety and precision. You frequently use basic verbs like 'shown', 'started', and 'increased'. There is also some awkward phrasing, such as 'best things to do for living in London' instead of 'best aspects of living in London'. To achieve a higher band, incorporate more precise academic vocabulary to describe trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', 'experienced a marginal decline', or 'peaked'. Avoid repeating the same sentence structures and vocabulary choices throughout the report to demonstrate a wider range of lexical control.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains several grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are issues with article usage ('the London'), prepositional errors ('at the 38%'), and awkward sentence construction ('the museum and art galleries record of percentage has been started'). While you attempt some complex structures, they are often inaccurate or poorly punctuated. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles. Practice writing sentences that combine data points using relative clauses or participle phrases to increase your grammatical range while maintaining accuracy. Proofreading for basic errors in tense and word order is also highly recommended.
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