Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-09-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar charts and line graph below show the results of a survey conducted over a three-year period to discover what people who live in London think of the city.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

What are the best things about living in London?

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The bar charts and line graph illustrate the outcome of survey about three years to produce what kinds of people live in London think of city.

There are total six steps shown in chart. Range of shops in London about year one is at the top about 45 percentage and in year two is in the middle and at approximately at 42 percentage and after that in year three range of shops at 40 percentage after that job opportunities is appear in chart in year one at round about 38 percentage and year two at 36 percentage and year three is also same. The third and fourth factor is plateau year one 41 percentage at top in mixture of people and after that museums and art gallery in which year three at highest point.

While on the other hand ,worst thing living in London in year one cost of living is at the top traffic congestion is also main problem and transport is the lowest point.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to describe the data but fails to provide a clear overview or highlight significant trends. The information is presented in a fragmented manner, and the description of the data is often inaccurate or confusing (e.g., 'There are total six steps shown in chart'). The report lacks a logical structure to compare the categories effectively. Furthermore, the data points mentioned are difficult to follow, and the response fails to distinguish between the different charts provided. To improve, you must identify the key features and trends rather than listing individual data points, and ensure the information is accurate and clearly presented.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response is divided into paragraphs, but the internal logic is weak. Cohesive devices are either missing or used incorrectly, such as the repetitive use of 'and after that' and 'in year one'. The progression of ideas is disjointed, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison of the survey results. Referencing is often unclear, and the lack of appropriate linking words makes the text feel like a series of disconnected sentences rather than a coherent report. Improving the use of transition signals and ensuring each paragraph has a clear focus would significantly enhance the flow.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. There is a reliance on basic terms like 'top', 'middle', and 'lowest point', which are used to describe data in a simplistic way. There are also errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'produce what kinds of people live in London think of city' and 'mixture of people'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to describe trends or data variations effectively. To reach a higher band, you should incorporate more precise academic vocabulary related to data description, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', or 'a significant proportion'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. There are significant issues with sentence structure, missing articles (e.g., 'in chart', 'at top'), and incorrect verb forms (e.g., 'job opportunities is appear'). Many sentences are poorly constructed, making the meaning ambiguous. There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and the simple sentences used often contain errors in basic grammar and punctuation. To improve, focus on mastering subject-verb agreement, correct article usage, and building more complex, error-free sentences to convey information clearly.

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