Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-09-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar charts and line graph below show the results of a survey conducted over a three-year period to discover what people who live in London think of the city.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

What are the best things about living in London?

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The bar graph compares the better things that available in london city . Below the survey over three year time duration to examine individual living in major city of personal expenditures.

To the part of overall, the major things found in london is wide range of shops in the 1st year and lowest as tranportation exepnse in the second year.

In the one hand, above mention graph and below one are different one's first bar demostrates the expenditure that are being uses in daily life of the citizens.Moreover, second bar illustrates the worst thing about london like cost of living is high in the first year as well as similarly, there are traffic congestion additionally crime remains the same in the initial year . While transport expenses are low in london as compare to other extra curicular expenditures.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, as it contains only 138 words, resulting in a necessary penalty under Task Achievement. Furthermore, the content struggles to accurately interpret the visual data provided. The student confuses the survey topics, mentioning 'personal expenditures' and 'cost of living' instead of focusing on what people think are the best things about living in London, as shown in the charts. While there is a brief mention of wide range of shops and transport expenses, the overall overview is confused and lacks a clear, fully developed summary of the main trends across the charts and line graph. Therefore, the task is only partially addressed.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5

The essay lacks clear logical organization and progression. The paragraphing is poorly handled, with abrupt transitions between ideas and a confusing structure. Transitional phrases such as 'To the part of overall' and 'In the one hand' are misused and unnatural, failing to guide the reader effectively through the text. Referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult to follow the relationship between the different charts mentioned. Cohesive devices are used inaccurately and mechanically, resulting in a disjointed text where information is not arranged in a coherent manner.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, severely straining the reader's comprehension. There are numerous word choice and collocation errors, such as 'better things that available in london city' and 'tranportation exepnse'. Less common lexical items are attempted but used incorrectly, and spelling errors are noticeable throughout the text (e.g., 'demostrates', 'curicular', 'exepnse'). The range of vocabulary is limited and inadequate for an academic task, restricting the precision needed to discuss statistical data.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response displays a very limited range of grammatical structures. Most sentences contain frequent and severe errors that often distort meaning, such as 'Below the survey over three year time duration to examine individual living...' and 'first bar demostrates the expenditure that are being uses in daily life'. Control over basic sentence architecture is weak, with missing verbs, incorrect verb forms, and faulty punctuation. These errors occur consistently throughout the text and frequently cause significant difficulty for the reader.

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