Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-09-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar charts and line graph below show the results of a survey conducted over a three-year period to discover what people who live in London think of the city.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

What are the best things about living in London?

Student answer (Band 4.5)

London is famous beacuse of its culture freedom and dignity for peoples.In the above graph there are many points and corn are showing but we can't defend one of them beacuse when you are living in any country you will face many benefits and problems at the same time.

Whenever we talk about job opportunities, ranges of shop and let's suppose mixture of people we could see London is enrichment for these opportunities. There is 45 % of chances in year 1 for ranges of shoes you can see everywhere and when we talk about job opportunities there is still alot of chances in year 1 ,2, and 3 we can search alot of jobs.

Additional we talk about worst things about living in London there is no one thing we should talk there is numerous like cost of living traffic congestion and many more 65% air quality is disrupted and 59% of noise pollution

Conclusion is that when we live in any specific place we couldn't say everything is smoth with smoothness there is roughness aswell

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The student attempts to describe the survey results regarding living in London, but the response falls short of fully satisfying the requirements of an Academic Task 1 report. Instead of providing an objective overview of the data presented in the charts and graph, the writing adopts an informal, conversational tone and includes personal commentary, such as 'when you are living in any country you will face many benefits and problems'. While the student mentions some specific figures like '45% of chances in year 1 for ranges of shoes' (misinterpreting the categories) and '65% air quality', the data is misreported and lacks a clear, structured overview comparing the various trends. Consequently, the task is addressed only partially, aligning with a Band 5 performance.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response is divided into brief paragraphs, but the overall organization lacks logical progression and clear cohesion. The transitions between ideas feel abrupt and disjointed, as seen when moving from job opportunities to the worst things about living in London with the phrase 'Additional we talk about worst things'. Furthermore, referencing is frequently unclear; for instance, the use of pronouns like 'them' in 'we can't defend one of them' lacks a clear antecedent. Cohesive devices are either missing, inadequate, or misused throughout the text. Paragraphing is attempted, but the internal structuring does not guide the reader smoothly through the data, placing this response firmly in the Band 4.5 to 5.0 range.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is basic, repetitive, and restricted, resulting in frequent word-choice errors that occasionally impede understanding. Examples include 'corn are showing' (likely meaning columns or charts), 'ranges of shop', and 'enrichment for these opportunities'. The student attempts some less common items such as 'congestion' and 'pollution', but misuse of terms is prevalent, such as '65% air quality is disrupted'. Spelling errors are also common throughout the text, including 'beacuse', 'alot', and 'smoth'. Because the lexical range is limited and contains noticeable errors that cause difficulty for the reader, it meets the criteria for Band 4.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The student relies predominantly on a very limited range of sentence structures, and attempts at more complex sentences are consistently faulty. There are persistent, fundamental grammatical errors, including missing prepositions, subject-verb agreement issues ('peoples', 'there is 45% of chances'), and run-on sentences with absent punctuation. For example, the opening sentence 'London is famous beacuse of its culture freedom and dignity for peoples' contains multiple punctuation and structural errors. Because errors are frequent, severe, and regularly distort meaning or strain the reader, this performance corresponds to a Band 4.0.

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