Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-09-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar charts and line graph below show the results of a survey conducted over a three-year period to discover what people who live in London think of the city.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

What are the best things about living in London?

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The bar charts and line graph show the results of a survey conducted over a three-year period to discover what people who live in uk .

Overall,in uk first year crime is the hightset and cost of housing the secoud one , in line graphs first and secound year show the same common requerstlike litter in starting point increace standly and decrease some point and noise not much more change .

on the first hand ,in bar chart cost f living and traffice congestion start as the highest concerns in 1 year at around 50 percentage cost of living remain hight and sees a decresaseby 3 years . transport and cost of housing show lower percentage overall,with transport sitting lowerst around 18 percentage in year .

one other hand in graph' litter starting point is 70 and stay 75 approxmatnly and they standly decrease10 point . air quality start is 60 and stay 57 and in the end the reached near about 55 , the last one noise they starting point 60and in the end they reached approxtimately 45.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to cover the three charts provided in the prompt, but the data reporting is inaccurate and confused. For instance, the student refers to the 'uk' rather than London, and misinterprets the charts regarding crime and housing. While an attempt at an overview is made in the second sentence, it is garbled ('crime is the hightset and cost of housing the secoud one'). Key features such as the dominant negative factors (cost of living, traffic) and positive factors (range of shops) are mentioned in a fragmented way, but the lack of accuracy in reading the figures and the poor overall development pull this score down to Band 4.0.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay lacks clear logical organisation and progression. Paragraphing is attempted, but internal coherence within paragraphs is severely undermined by poor sentence structure and fragmented ideas, such as 'on the first hand ,in bar chart...'. Cohesive devices are either misused or absent. Referencing between sentences is unclear, and the mechanical transitions ('on the first hand', 'one other hand') fail to guide the reader smoothly through the text. Overall progression is difficult to discern, placing the response firmly at Band 4.0.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive. There are frequent spelling errors ('hightset', 'secoud', 'requerstlike', 'increace', 'standly', 'decresaseby', 'lowerst', 'approxmatnly'), which cause strain for the reader. While the student attempts some topic-related vocabulary such as 'cost of living', 'traffic congestion', and 'air quality', the overall lexical control is inadequate, containing numerous word choice and spelling inaccuracies that impede communication. This corresponds to a Band 4.0 level.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting mostly of simple and attempted complex sentences that are heavily flawed. There is a near-total lack of correct punctuation, with spaces placed before commas and periods. Errors are pervasive throughout the text ('cost of living remain hight and sees a decresaseby 3 years', 'litter starting point is 70 and stay 75 approxmatnly'), frequently distorting meaning and causing severe difficulty for the reader. This performance aligns with the Band 4.0 descriptors.

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