Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-09-18

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar charts and line graph below show the results of a survey conducted over a three-year period to discover what people who live in London think of the city.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

What are the best things about living in London?

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The graph shows the best and worst things about London.In which it indicate all factors of about 3 years.This report show the different result of all.

Overall,The main pleasent advantages is range of shop.Which is above 40% for 3 years and main worst thing is the cost of living which is 50% or above 50% for 3 years.

If we completely discuss about the best thing.The first of all is Range of shops which is above 50% for 3 years.The gray coloure show the first year,white show second year and the black indicate third year BTW the second one is job opportunity which is below 40% and above 30% for 3 years,third one is mixture of people same as before below 40% and above 30%,next one is Art galleris that is down to 40%,30% or above,aftar thats is eight life which is below 30% and above 20% last one is transport above 20% and below 30% for years.

The Bad things about London first of all is Cost of living which is above 50% below and 50% after is Traffic that is 50% and above 50% Next one is Crime that above 50% in first year 40% second and above 40% after that is cost of housing which is 40% and below 40% Last one is Transport 40% for first year and 30% for second and third.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5

The student attempts to describe the charts and graphs, but the response suffers from significant data misinterpretation and vague reporting. For instance, the student states that the range of shops is 'above 50% for 3 years,' whereas the data shows it is around 41% to 45%. Furthermore, several figures are misread or stated inaccurately (e.g., claiming transport is 'above 20% and below 30% for years' when figures fluctuate). The overview attempts to highlight main features, but it is marred by imprecise figures and poor expression. While the student covers the 'best' and 'worst' sections of the visual data, the lack of accurate data reporting and lack of development in presenting key comparisons keeps this at a Band 4.5 level, satisfying basic task requirements minimally.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay lacks clear paragraphing and logical progression, frequently grouping disparate ideas into dense, poorly structured blocks. Transitions between sentences are abrupt, and the student relies on conversational or inappropriate meta-commentary, such as 'If we completely discuss about the best thing' and 'BTW the second one is job opportunity.' Referencing and cohesive devices are inadequate and mechanical, with repetitive phrasing like 'which is above 50% below and 50% after' used frequently. Although there is a general separation of best and worst features, the overall lack of control over cohesive ties and paragraph structure aligns with Band 4.0 descriptors.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is very basic, repetitive, and heavily relies on direct lifting or awkward paraphrasing from the prompt (e.g., 'range of shop', 'job opportunity', 'cost of living'). The student makes frequent word-choice errors, such as inventing the term 'eight life' instead of 'night life' and 'Art galleris'. There is an inability to control less common vocabulary or varied collocations, leading to awkward expressions like 'main pleasent advantages'. Because the vocabulary is narrow and contains frequent spelling and lexical errors that strain the reader's understanding, a Band 4.0 is appropriate.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response demonstrates a very limited range of grammatical structures. Most sentences are simple or poorly constructed attempts at complex forms that fail due to missing verbs, incorrect prepositions, and severe punctuation errors. Examples include fragments and run-on sentences like 'The graph shows the best and worst things about London.In which it indicate all factors of about 3 years.' Subject-verb agreement is frequently violated ('This report show', 'the gray coloure show'), and articles are frequently missing or misused. Due to the high frequency of basic grammatical errors that often distort meaning and impede smooth reading, the grammar score is Band 4.0.

See this exact question answered at other band scores — the same prompt compared across bands.

Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.