Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-09-22
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar charts and line graph below show the results of a survey conducted over a three-year period to discover what people who live in London think of the city.
Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
What are the best things about living in London?
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The illustrated chart is the combination of multipe thing in it which provide the information about the people staying in London more than 3 years of time.
Overall, the graph shown in the best thing about living in London is range of shops there and the worst things about living in this city is traffic congestion.
Firstly, the chart which show why should people are in the city. Majorliy, the number of shops is very high, and also individuals are there because of many other things as like, job, museums, night life and transpotation which are given in the time period of 3 years.
Secondly, citizens of that city also have some things which makes there life worst in London. The cost of living is so high and the traffic congestion are also constant in last two years. As line chart shows 3 major problems which are faced by the people who are living in London, litter is high in the second years which is more tahn 70%.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5
The response attempts to describe the charts and line graph, mentioning several key aspects such as the range of shops, job opportunities, and traffic congestion. However, the coverage of the visual data is very limited and contains inaccuracies. The student fails to mention or accurately interpret the third part of the data regarding 'litter, air quality, and noise', and the data points cited are vague or incomplete. Furthermore, the overview provided in the second sentence is extremely brief and only touches upon two categories out of many. To reach a higher band, the candidate must select and compare key features across all three charts more thoroughly without relying on vague summaries.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response shows an attempt to structure the report into paragraphs, using basic transition signals such as 'Overall', 'Firstly', and 'Secondly'. However, overall progression is lacking due to weak paragraphing and abrupt shifts in topic. Cohesive devices are used mechanically and often inaccurately, such as 'the chart which show why should people are in the city'. Referencing is frequently unclear (e.g., 'the graph shown in the best thing', 'that city'). There is no logical flow connecting the different charts presented in the prompt, making it difficult for the reader to follow the progression of ideas.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
The lexical range is quite limited and repetitive. The student relies on basic vocabulary such as 'things', 'city', 'high', and 'good'. There are numerous word choice and collocation errors throughout the response, such as 'multipe thing', 'makes there life worst', 'transpotation', and 'more tahn 70%'. Less common lexical items are rarely attempted successfully, and spelling errors ('multipe', 'Majorliy', 'transpotation', 'tahn') detract from the clarity of the writing. Vocabulary control is inadequate for a higher score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The response exhibits a very limited range of grammatical structures. Simple sentences dominate, and attempts at complex structures are consistently flawed, resulting in ungrammatical clauses like 'the chart which show why should people are in the city' and 'the graph shown in the best thing about living in London is range of shops'. Errors in subject-verb agreement ('the traffic congestion are also constant'), tense usage, and prepositions are frequent and often impede communication. Punctuation is also erratic, hindering the overall readability of the text.
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