Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-09-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar charts and line graph below show the results of a survey conducted over a three-year period to discover what people who live in London think of the city.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

What are the best things about living in London?

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The line graph illustrate the information about an server conducted in three years to disvover what people really thinks about living in london. the graph illustrates 3 years with different colours, it includes the best think as well as the worst things in this city.

The graph provides data about bad things which include things like cost of living traffic congestion, crime cost of housing and tranport oover three years.

First of all, the best things include range of shopping, job opportunites, mixture of people night life and transport. transport in london is good at the lkeast and the greatest good thing is the range of shops because it provieds the ability to get more jobs or varity of things,

On the other hand, cost of living as well as trafic jams are the great worst things too it effect the normal living of line mostly, And the other thing is crime which is quite high in bratin too, and the least bad thing in london is the transport too

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The response attempts to describe the survey results, but the coverage of the visual data is very limited and superficial. While it mentions some positive and negative aspects from the charts, such as the range of shops and cost of living, it misses major data points and trends, failing to properly synthesise the information or present a clear overview. Furthermore, there are inaccuracies in reporting the data (for instance, claiming transport is both a good and a bad thing without clear distinction of the actual percentages or years). This corresponds to Band 5, as the task is addressed only partially, with limited and underdeveloped ideas.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the overall progression lacks clarity and logical structure. The introduction is weak and contains multiple errors. While basic cohesive devices are used, such as 'First of all' and 'On the other hand', referencing and paragraphing are poorly managed. For instance, the second paragraph abruptly introduces 'bad things' with a run-on list, and sentences within paragraphs often lack logical connection. This places the response firmly at Band 5.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

The lexical range is quite limited and repetitive. Words and phrases like 'things', 'bad things', 'good thing', and 'cost of living' are used repeatedly. There are also numerous spelling errors throughout the text (e.g., 'illustrate' instead of 'illustrates', 'server' instead of 'survey', 'disvover' instead of 'discover', 'think' instead of 'things', 'tranport' instead of 'transport', 'oover' instead of 'over', 'opportunites', 'varity', 'trafic', 'effect' instead of 'affect', 'britan'). These frequent errors and the narrow vocabulary fit the Band 4 descriptor.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The response shows a very limited range of grammatical structures. Simple sentences dominate, and attempts at more complex structures frequently result in serious errors, such as subject-verb agreement issues ('The line graph illustrate') and run-on sentences ('On the other hand, cost of living as well as trafic jams are the great worst things too it effect the normal living of line mostly'). Punctuation is largely neglected, with missing capitalisation at the beginning of sentences ('london', 'the graph', 'first of all') and missing full stops. Errors are frequent and strain the reader, warranting a Band 4.

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