Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-09-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar charts and line graph below show the results of a survey conducted over a three-year period to discover what people who live in London think of the city.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

What are the best things about living in London?

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar chart has demonstrated the living experience of people who living in london at various aspects such as range of shops, job opportunities, and museums, and art gallery etc. the survey reveals the best thing about living in the london is range of shops. it has got the highest percentages in all the three periods. the job opportunities had the second highest. as the job opportunities placed in higher percentages. diverse people from diverse community effort to migrate to london.

Hence mixture of the people had occupied the third highest. additionally, the report has mentioned that museum and art gallery, night life, and transport are consitered as best things after the inclusivity nature of london.

Compared to first year third year the job opportunities had a fallen. as well as, there are worse things has been listed in a separate bar chart. that indicates cost of living is reported as the worst thing. some other factors associated with cost living are traffic traffic congestion, crime, cost of housing, and transport accordingly.

the line graph shown the people concern on litter, air quality, and noise. year three had the decread percentage of above problem. it seems the solutions for the issues is carrying out.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The response attempts to cover all three parts of the visual data, mentioning the best things, worst things, and the line graph regarding problems like litter, air quality, and noise. However, the data reporting is frequently vague, inaccurate, or incomplete. For example, stating that 'range of shops' had the 'highest percentages in all the three periods' is correct, but other figures are generalized without proper comparative detail or precise figures. Furthermore, some of the descriptions rely on speculation rather than objective data reporting, such as claiming 'diverse people from diverse community effort to migrate to london.' Because the ideas are underdeveloped and the data is only partially conveyed, it fits the criteria for Band 5.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The organization of the report is weak. The student fails to use standard paragraphing, splitting the response into a chaotic block of sentences with inconsistent capitalization and missing punctuation at sentence boundaries. While transitional markers like 'Hence' and 'additionally' are attempted, cohesive devices are often misused or mechanical. Progression between ideas lacks logical clarity, making it difficult to follow the transition from the best things to the worst things and finally to the line graph data. Overall coherence is severely hampered by poor punctuation and paragraphing structure, corresponding to a Band 4.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The lexical range is limited and repetitive, with basic vocabulary used throughout the text (e.g., 'best thing', 'worst things', 'factors'). There are noticeable word choice and collocation errors, such as 'inclusivity nature', 'a fallen' instead of 'a fall', and 'people concern on' instead of 'public concern regarding'. Spelling and word formation are inconsistent, including typos like 'consitered' and 'decread'. While the vocabulary is minimally adequate to convey basic concepts related to the prompt, the frequent errors and restricted range place it firmly at Band 5.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

Grammatical control is weak throughout the essay. The text contains pervasive capitalization errors (starting sentences and proper nouns with lowercase letters) and severe punctuation lapses, resulting in run-on sentences and fragmented clauses. There is a limited range of grammatical structures, and attempts at complex sentences frequently contain structural errors, such as 'Compared to first year third year the job opportunities had a fallen' and 'it seems the solutions for the issues is carrying out.' Grammatical errors are frequent and cause considerable difficulty for the reader, matching the Band 4 descriptors.

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