Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-09-26
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar charts and line graph below show the results of a survey conducted over a three-year period to discover what people who live in London think of the city.
Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
What are the best things about living in London?
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The graph illustrates best and worst thing about living in London over 3 years and also show the percentage of of people to whome these things are a major problem in London.
overall, range of shops, job oportunities and mixture of people are the best thing about living in London. In contrast cost of living, traffic congestion and crimes are the most worst thing about living in London. And percentage of people varies during this 3 years .
Range of shops, job opportunites and mixture of peolpe are considered as a best thing about living in London over 3 years period of time however it had shown a slight fluctuation . Meuseum and art gllaries had increases its percentage in this period of time. Meanwhile night life and transport remain alomst same in those 3 years.
cost of living, traffic congestion and crimes are the most worst thing about living in london although the percentage of crime had been lower during the given period of time . cost if housing and transport are another bad thing about London.
The percentage of noise, air quality and litter are the major issue for the people living in london . the percentage of noise and air quality is decreases with the time and l
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The student attempts to address all parts of the visual data by outlining the best and worst aspects of living in London, as well as the survey results regarding major problems. However, the response is incomplete, trailing off at the end ("and l"). Furthermore, the overview is extremely basic and contains mechanical listing rather than a well-synthesised summary of main trends. Data points are mentioned, but often without precise or accurate referencing to the specific figures provided in the charts. According to Band 5 descriptors, the response addresses the task only partially and key features are insufficiently developed or described with inaccuracies.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The organisation of the text is somewhat disjointed. While the student attempts a rudimentary paragraph structure corresponding to the different charts, the progression of ideas lacks clarity. Cohesive devices are minimal or misused (e.g., repeating "Range of shops, job opportunites and mixture of peolpe"). Paragraphing is inconsistent, and the text ends abruptly mid-sentence, indicating a lack of control over overall text structure. These features align with Band 5, where there is some organisation but no clear overall progression, and cohesive devices are inadequate or repetitive.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is very basic, repetitive, and restricted (e.g., repeatedly using "best thing about living in London" and "worst thing about living in London"). There are numerous spelling errors throughout the text, such as "oportunites", "peolpe", "Meuseum", "gllaries", "alomst", and "decreases". Less common lexical items are attempted unsuccessfully or incorrectly (e.g., "most worst thing"). This fits the Band 4 to 5 range, where vocabulary is limited and errors in spelling and word choice are frequent enough to strain the reader.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The student relies heavily on simple sentence structures and repetitive subject-verb patterns. Grammatical accuracy is low, with frequent errors including missing articles ("best thing", "cost of living"), incorrect comparative forms ("most worst thing"), subject-verb agreement errors ("percentage of noise and air quality is decreases"), and capitalization issues. Punctuation is also poorly handled, with spaces before commas and lowercase letters at the beginnings of sentences. This reflects Band 4, where errors are frequent and basic structures dominate.
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