Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-09-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar charts and line graph below show the results of a survey conducted over a three-year period to discover what people who live in London think of the city.
Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
What are the best things about living in London?
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The bar chart and line graph shows the propotion of both best and bad things about london city of which people thinks in the last three years. Overall, in the first bar chart the servey gives us information about best things about london .Range of shops has one of the highest percentage which is followed by job opportunities.transport and night time which has the lowest pecentage.The second graph shows the percentage of bad things in which traffic congestion and cost of living has highest propotion while cost of housing and transport has in the lowest catogery. b From the above data it is vividly seen that range of shops which is 45 percent highest ratio considering one of the good thing in lodon.While mixture of people in first and 2 year has about 35 percent.Night time has 25 percent consider by people which is slightly low in the first 2 years
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response attempts to describe the provided charts and graphs, but it suffers from severe limitations in content coverage, accuracy, and organisation. While the writer mentions some categories such as 'range of shops', 'job opportunities', and 'traffic congestion', the data reported frequently misinterprets the charts or lacks precision (e.g., stating 'Night time has 25 percent' rather than accurately detailing trends over the three-year period). Furthermore, the response is abruptly incomplete and fails to cover all three visual data sets adequately, particularly the third chart regarding major problems. Overall, the ideas are under-developed, and the lack of a coherent overview means the response falls short of the higher band requirements, earning a Band 4.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The organisational structure is weak and disjointed. Paragraphing is erratic, featuring very short, fragmented sections (including a random stray letter 'b' and an isolated sentence) that disrupt the logical flow of the report. Although there are some basic attempts to introduce sections, cohesive devices are generally inadequate or mechanical. There is no clear overall progression or logical grouping of information from the charts. Referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison of data across the three years. This level of cohesion and structural control aligns with a Band 4.0 descriptor.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is basic, repetitive, and heavily relies on lifting terms directly from the prompt. Examples such as 'best things', 'bad things', 'highest percentage', and 'lowest catogery' demonstrate a limited range. There are also frequent spelling and word-choice errors, such as 'propotion' instead of proportion, 'servey' instead of survey, and 'lodon' instead of London. These lexical inadequacies and frequent spelling mistakes strain the reader and reflect a performance typical of Band 4.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
Grammatical control is weak throughout the response. The text contains numerous errors in basic sentence structure, subject-verb agreement, and punctuation. For instance, the opening sentence 'The bar chart and line graph shows...' exhibits a singular/plural agreement error. There are frequent run-on sentences, missing capitals for proper nouns ('london'), and awkward phrasings such as 'of which people thinks' and 'consider by people'. Complex structures are attempted but are generally faulty. Because errors are frequent and occasionally obscure the intended meaning, this performance warrants a Band 4.0.
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