Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-09-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar charts and line graph below show the results of a survey conducted over a three-year period to discover what people who live in London think of the city.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

What are the best things about living in London?

Student answer (Band 4.0)

the bar charts and line graphb shows result of the survey about the opinions of people living in the london over a period of three year

overall,the range of shops considerd the best thinks living in london,while the cost of living,traffic congestion and the crime were the main disadvantges,litter was also the most common major problem among there envirmental issue

in the first chart shows the 45% of living thing in london in first year which is increasing after three years later the population in living in london has decreaed ,and by the passage of times and about one year the living thing who lives in london has been also decreased due to envirmental issues and some other major crime

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response falls significantly short of the 150-word minimum, containing only 120 words. This severely limits the candidate's ability to develop a fully articulated response. While the student attempts to mention aspects from the charts such as shopping, cost of living, and environmental issues, the information is presented in a fragmented, highly confusing manner. For instance, the statement '45% of living thing in london in first year' makes little sense and misinterprets the data. The overview is weak and fails to accurately capture the main trends across the three charts provided. Consequently, the task achievement is restricted to a lower band due to under-length and incomplete, inaccurate data representation.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The text suffers from poor overall organisation and lacks standard paragraphing conventions. The essay is essentially split into only three run-on sentences with minimal punctuation and no capitalization for proper nouns or sentence beginnings (e.g., 'the bar charts', 'london'). Cohesive devices are either missing or misused (e.g., 'and by the passage of times and about one year'), which disrupts the flow and makes logical progression difficult to follow. There is no clear structure separating an introduction, overview, and body paragraphs, leading to a confusing read that fails to guide the reader smoothly through the data.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is very basic and heavily repetitive, with frequent spelling mistakes throughout the text (e.g., 'graphb', 'considerd', 'thinks', 'disandges', 'envirmental'). The range of words is extremely limited and inadequate for an academic task report. Basic terms related to data and statistics are either absent or misspelled, and collocation is generally weak (e.g., 'living thing in london'). Vocabulary errors frequently cause strain for the reader and obscure the intended meaning of several statements.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

Grammatical control is very weak, with numerous basic errors in punctuation, capitalization, and sentence structure. There is a complete lack of accurate complex sentences, and even simple clauses are often ungrammatical (e.g., 'the bar charts and line graphb shows result of the survey'). Run-on sentences dominate the response due to the absence of full stops and capital letters. Errors occur with high frequency throughout the entire text, severely impeding communication and demonstrating a very limited command of English grammar.

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