Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-10-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar charts and line graph below show the results of a survey conducted over a three-year period to discover what people who live in London think of the city.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

What are the best things about living in London?

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The given bar charts and line graoh illustrate the results of a survey conducted over a three-year period to discover what people who live in london think of the city.

Overall, as it can be seen that many different aspects of life in london is shown in certain measurments which are high and low depicting results.

On the one hand, it is clear that the best thing about living in london is the variety of shops avaliable as shown in the in barchart secondly, job opportunities and mixture of people are also accounted as best things about living remained at the same level of around 37% to 35%. Furthermore, museum and art galleries are accounted for 35% of the total while, night life and transport were roughly the same. Lastly, as for the worst things about living in london cost of living and traffic congestion were almost similar with around 57% to 48%.

Additionally, as about the worst thing crime rate in london is also very high which is not ideal situation for living whereas cost of housing and transport are also not good accounted for around 35% to 28%. Moreover, as for the line graph litter started at 70% in the first year gradually increasing to 75% and further fell to 68% in the third year. Lastly air quality and noise were parallel with each other with the gap of 7% of gap.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The response addresses the task only partially, presenting a limited and somewhat mechanical selection of data from the charts and line graph. While the candidate attempts to give an overview and mention several categories such as shops, job opportunities, and cost of living, the information is frequently vague, inadequately supported, or inaccurate regarding the specific figures presented in the source material. For instance, the overview provided in the second paragraph ('as it can be seen that many different aspects of life in london is shown in certain measurments which are high and low') is underdeveloped and fails to clearly summarise the main trends across the charts. To reach a higher level, the writer needs to select and clearly report key features and significant comparisons rather than listing isolated data points with imprecise percentages.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is some basic organisation in this response, dividing the content into an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion-like final section, but there is no clear overall progression of ideas. Cohesive devices are used mechanically and sometimes inaccurately, such as the awkward transition 'Additionally, as about the worst thing'. Paragraphing is attempted, but the grouping of information lacks logical flow; for example, mixing disparate survey questions and categories together within the same paragraphs. Reference words and substitution are occasionally unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the exact relationships between the data points. To improve Coherence and Cohesion, the writer should ensure that each paragraph focuses on a cohesive theme—such as grouping all the 'best things' data together—and use a wider range of accurate logical connectors to guide the reader smoothly through the comparisons.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is limited and minimally adequate for the task, featuring frequent spelling and word-choice errors that occasionally cause difficulty for the reader. There are multiple spelling mistakes involving common words and proper nouns, such as 'graoh' instead of graph, 'london' in lowercase, 'measurments', 'avaliable', and 'barchart'. The range of vocabulary is restricted, relying heavily on repetitive phrases and basic descriptions rather than attempting less common lexical items with precision. Collocations are also weak, as seen in phrases like 'accounted for best things' or 'not good accounted for'. To achieve a higher band score, the candidate must expand their vocabulary range to include precise terms for describing statistical data and trends, while simultaneously paying closer attention to accurate spelling and word formation.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response displays a very limited range of sentence structures, relying mostly on simple sentences or awkward attempts at complex structures that are frequently faulty. There are persistent errors in grammar, punctuation, and agreement throughout the text, such as missing capitalisation for proper nouns ('london'), subject-verb agreement issues ('aspects of life in london is shown'), and run-on sentence constructions lacking proper punctuation. For example, sentences like 'Furthermore, museum and art galleries are accounted for 35% of the total while, night life and transport were roughly the same' demonstrate weak control over clause structures and punctuation. To improve, the writer needs to practise forming complex sentences accurately, ensure correct verb tenses and pluralisation, and eliminate basic punctuation errors to enhance overall readability and structural variety.

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